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Contabo
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0 posted 2004-08-04 03:28 PM


Abstinence

It was, save for two months pregnant,
my thirtieth year full term
at January’s backdoor midst the Winter bite,
with an Orwellian prophecy without doubt unfolding.

In hindsight, two decades plus eight months past
I perceive stimulation visited my sweat lodge
beckoning me from one half a Van Winkle sleep
to muse on the metamorphosis of life predating
and that which was to pass in front weepy eyes
sheltered by limping shadows of abstinence.

From this vantage point, two decades plus eight months
out from the birthing
knowledge is further a precious commodity,
growth a prerequisite of passion
and sweat…….
the blood of dream weavers.
  


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Susan Caldwell
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1 posted 2004-08-04 03:35 PM


I read this 3 times..wanting so badly to get the entirety of meaning...

I fail.

But I liked it anyway..

"cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind"
~Sarah McLachlan~

Contabo
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2 posted 2004-08-04 03:40 PM


I thank you for reading Susan. I am sorry that you read it 3 times.

I know your time is valuable.

Contabo

Susan Caldwell
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3 posted 2004-08-04 03:48 PM


wow. ah..

no.

my time is no more valuable than the next persons.

What I meant was that I read it three times because it was that good, and I wanted to understand every word.  

iliana
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4 posted 2004-08-05 01:33 AM


I love mysteries and this one is wonderful!  I read it as very political, but then again, the reader can bend it in many directions.  Bravo!
passing shadows
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5 posted 2004-08-05 04:45 AM


interesting, no doubt
miscellanea
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6 posted 2004-08-05 05:55 AM


"From this vantage point, two decades plus eight months
out from the birthing
knowledge is further a precious commodity,
growth a prerequisite of passion
and sweat…….
the blood of dream weavers."

and I reread it several times, but got a totally different meaning.  Isn't poetry at its best when it can have several interpretations?   Thank you for sharing. Stimulating reading.
         miscellanea

Contabo
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7 posted 2004-08-05 04:43 PM


Thank you for reading.....all of you.

I wish I could tell the meaning, but that really wouldn't be right.

Contabo

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