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JL
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since 2004-04-01
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Texas, USA

0 posted 2004-08-04 11:45 AM


Ophelia’s Secret
(1866, Insane Asylum Number 3)


Where is it, that your mind has gone, Ophelia?
Are you looking at me, or him?That bog Hamlet!
Can you not see me, or hear me whispering your name?
Calling out: “Here I am, your true love, Ophelia…”

Oh, if I were half the retched man your father is I would…

…No…

I must not think such horrific thoughts, Ophelia, for your sake.
Maybe there is that one small chance you will awaken
from this illness, which has overtaken you…

Here I must be, I must be here to hold you, my beloved Ophelia…
I must not tempt fate.
Although, I would… I most certainly would.

Why do you look at that man Hamlet?
He only wants your youth.
Only for his own sake!
Hamlet is not like his father,
yet there are those that say he is, however,
they are incorrect in that assumption.

He is not the man for you…
My Ophelia….
Listen to my heart, Ophelia.
It is singing to your heart.
Can you hear it, can you?

Maybe, I should have this-one fall, this young Hamlet.
Just as his father did, from the poison in his ear…

That is what I could do for you Ophelia.
I could do that my love.
Yes… I think I shall.Hamlet the younger will pass on
as did his father, with a poison in his ear….

But I must be careful not to be caught in Hamlet’s trap.
He would most certainly set a trap for me,
if he knew my love for you…
He most certainly would…

I must be silent about my plan…
No one should know. No one!
I will write it down on this parchment
and carry it close to my heart.
My heart and yours, Ophelia…

I know that look in your eyes, Ophelia.
I know that love you hold for me.
But you restrain it within your heart,
to hide it from him…

But why do you bring him with you
each time you visit me?
Why can you not find your way to me
without that retched Hamlet at your side?

I peer out this small window awaiting your return,
Ophelia…

My mind is convinced you shall belong to me,
and your mind and heart will too.
When I complete my undertaking
that work that I must do…

Being rid of that Hamlet!
He thinks I will give you up to him
With his silly notions and potions, and whim…
Lookin into my eyes with his luminous stick
searching for that parchment,
That writing in my head
In there where he says I am sick…

I think not Hamlet!
Unlock this door and let me free!
Untie these retched garments from my body
That is what I shall say to that filthy bog!
I watch you, Hamlet, with my Ophelia.
I see that gaze in your eyes
And I know what I should do…
:::
I know your secret, Ophelia…
I know… I know…

It is mine too…

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Sunshine
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Listening to every heart
1 posted 2004-08-04 11:53 AM


He is not the man for you…
My Ophelia….
Listen to my heart, Ophelia.
It is singing to your heart.
Can you hear it, can you?

~*~

JL...

we're listening...

LeeJ
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since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296

2 posted 2004-08-04 12:21 PM


wow, an awesome read JL...sad and gripping, held my attention all the way through, very much enjoyed....thank you for writing and sharing.

Hugs...Lee J.

Earth Angel
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since 2002-08-27
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Realms of Light
3 posted 2004-08-04 03:26 PM


My heart be still! The great William himself would be smiling at this fine rendition!

If only Shakespeare had written as ye have done, then I would have enjoyed his works even more!

Love & Light,
EA

Susan Caldwell
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since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348
Florida
4 posted 2004-08-04 03:30 PM


JL~

This was different in a very impressive way.

I enjoyed this very much!

"cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind"
~Sarah McLachlan~

iliana
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since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434
USA
5 posted 2004-08-06 03:19 AM


JL -- Bravo!  The ending was great!   ...jo
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