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Dark Stranger
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since 2001-03-19
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0 posted 2004-08-03 08:49 AM


we were twins
from almost birth
and from different mothers
that were connected
through leave it
to beaver later

you were dark
and I was identical
but pale on purpose
since I was taller
you got to be
the shadow

you were an innie
I was an outie
we pretended to trade
but gave them back
when we were alone
in our seperate rooms

we went to school
together
at different schools
we were inseparable
like water and oil
when it is cold

we knew each other then
better than the best friends
we had never met
and now we meet again
for the first time
back to back facing

some reciprocal ocean
______________

Dark


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Sunshine
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1 posted 2004-08-03 08:54 AM


You brought back a lot of memories for me on this...so I thank you, once again, for looking outside in.
MGROVES
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2 posted 2004-08-03 08:55 AM


wow. dont quite have the words for this one. but i truly enjoyed


Seymour Tabin
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3 posted 2004-08-03 08:55 AM


Dark,
LOL enjoyed the read.

Enchantress
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Canada eh.
4 posted 2004-08-03 08:59 AM


"we knew each other then
better than the best friends
we had never met
and now we meet again
for the first time
back to back facing

some reciprocal ocean"

Don't always have the time to sign D.
But I'm always here reading.
Hugs~

~ Those who complain the sun has gone out of their world
       ....have obviously never danced in the rain ~

SEA
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with you
5 posted 2004-08-03 09:33 AM


"you were an innie
I was an outie
we pretended to trade
but gave them back
when we were alone
in our seperate rooms"

I liked this one very much....

Martie
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6 posted 2004-08-03 10:32 AM


DS

Amazing!  

iliana
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7 posted 2004-08-03 10:33 AM


Amazing write, Dark Stranger!
Startime55
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8 posted 2004-08-03 10:55 AM


A powerful read that draws one to read it again and again...

LeeJ
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9 posted 2004-08-03 11:02 AM


a beautiful read, I thought at one time, I had this...my God, the passion/wants/desires for his sucess, which all happened, but unfortunately, didn't include me...sometimes life is like that, nature's way of saying, you were not meant to be, not in a mean way, but in a realistic way...he didn't love me the same way, now he's very happy, successful and perhaps, even in love with his real twin.  We're all looking for that twin, and we all deserve to find them.

Incredibly wonderful write, thank you for the memories and much hope for the future.

Hugs...Lee J.

Susan
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since 2004-03-27
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walking the surreal
10 posted 2004-08-03 02:52 PM


Reading your work is like taking a fast ride on a curvy road edged with the unexpected -- much enjoyed.

  Susan

Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you.  Joy is a state of mind.

JL
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11 posted 2004-08-03 03:08 PM


Enjoyed this write very much!  Good one.

JL



Janet Marie
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12 posted 2004-08-03 06:20 PM


you were dark
and I was identical
but pale on purpose
since I was taller
you got to be
the shadow

you were an innie
I was an outie
we pretended to trade
but gave them back
when we were alone
in our seperate rooms

============================
we knew each other then
better than the best friends
we had never met
and now we meet again
for the first time
back to back facing

some reciprocal ocean


==============================


this is..........................

wowzers....

unbelievably cool....

*nearly speechless moth* lol

Dark Angel
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13 posted 2004-08-03 11:01 PM


Simply Awesome!

I love the way you pen your thoughts DS.

Mxx

The clouds never expect it when it rains, but the sea, changes colour, but the sea, does not change.
~Stevie Nicks~

Decaflame
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14 posted 2004-08-04 09:15 AM


Our days run by too quickly...
back to the top for those that missed you.

passing shadows
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displaced
15 posted 2004-08-04 12:51 PM


sigh
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