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Winging It
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Winging It |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside 
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~*~ It's been awhile since I headed out to the desert where the road steers clear and keeps on going the sun so harsh it nearly burned me, not once but twice, setting a fire in my heart from the heat. I can't say the reasons why I kept going back to the same oasis pitching my lean to next to yours knowing you had already moved on as if you were never there. Dissipating like a mirage I wanted to believe in, your pain being a high price for my tears. I used to dream of places by mistake where water was falling all around me but it never quenched my thirst each sip a bitter slip a taste of moonshine, that crossed my eyes and broke my heart. Awakened by the sound of wild wind blowing playing a song on the river that soothed me remembering how it set me up on a thrown and then threw me, and I was the only one there to witness my fall. Winging the silent nights on my own where no compassion is found what used to chill me to the bone left behind a thick layer of dust to shake off. and to think of all the stars I would have been missing. ~*~ [This message has been edited by BluesSerenade (08-02-2004 12:05 PM).] |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
 all the stars,yes all the stars, still there.......... you are the main one, my dear girlfriend, always look up and find your own star first... love you blondie...drop me a line |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
"remembering how it set me up on a thrown and then threw me, and I was the only one there to witness my fall." and it doesn't matter if you are the only one there to witness the getting up again - it's simply important to witness all things be they big or small. Also, have you ever really fallen and been aware of that split second or two when you automatically reacted to protect yourself like putting your hands out? Life's like that - we fall and get hurt but there's always that split second. Enjoyed your words as usual dear Bluesy. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Awakened by the sound of wild wind blowing playing a song on the river that soothed me remembering how it set me up on a thrown and then threw me, and I was the only one there to witness my fall. Winging the silent nights on my own where no compassion is found what used to chill me to the bone left behind a thick layer of dust to shake off. When I think of all the stars I would have been missing. =========================== such a deeply emotional write... like a diary page turned into bittersweet poetry. These last verses really hit home for me... the moth is keeping this one. Beautiful writing Lori-girl. |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Ah, classic Lori.... the poem a thing of beauty, but with a twist of heart for those who know your inner language. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
I, myself, am often winging it with a song and a prayer! ~ but it works! ~ usually! You sure do know how to stir up my emotions with your descriptive and emotive writes, Dear Bluesy One! Your name suits you! You can write the blues like no other! Loving hugs, Linda |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
I've always had a hard time telling what and who is for real or not, now I know. Thanks so much for your nice replies, I appreciate them and you, I do. Sincerely~ While I'm at it, I think I'll do a quick edit.  |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Lori "Winging the silent nights on my own where no compassion is found"  |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Thank you Martie girl~ |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
"Winging the silent nights on my own where no compassion is found what used to chill me to the bone left behind a thick layer of dust to shake off. and to think of all the stars I would have been missing." Lori -- Oh the memories....maybe to keep some wind under our wings? You know, now that I'm getting older I think back on the places where I pitched my tent with great fondness (yes bittersweet) although at the time, I thought I would die of heartache or be an old bitter woman -- it just didn't go like that (after shaking off the dust). Your very lovely, deeply sensitive poem had that feel about it to me. .... .....jo |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
Warm and tender! Very nice write. JL  |
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Local Rebel Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-21
Posts 5767Southern Abstentia |
you may have fallen... but, your tiara is untarnished beautiful Lori |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Wonderful write straight from your heart Bluesyone. hugs, Chris "At one glance |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Thank you always, everyone~ |
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