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Foxyoasis
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since 2003-06-10
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0 posted 2004-08-01 06:39 AM


Drink to get away
for another hour
or minute or second

One last sip to the
bottom I miss
untill it's to late
its me who is comtemplating
my own fate


Just want to be happy just
want to enjoy my life not endure
the pain that has been bestowed on
me just want to be free from my
pain my agony


don't worry im not going to anything stupid just was a poem I written last nite to get negative stuff out. besides that do you think its good nuff for me to file in my records

Fool me once shame on you.....Fool me twice shame on me.....


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Contabo
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since 2001-11-21
Posts 159

1 posted 2004-08-01 07:13 AM


It is good to use poetry to exorcise demons in us. When I have something very painful to say with poetry, I try to remember that others may not want to hear about it though. Everyone has problems. So I pile on the metaphors!!!

If you want to file this away to read again, then by all means do so. I would… and then when the mood lightened, I would revise. You will be amazed how that will help you.

You keep writing!!!!!

Contabo



If I went on revising everything that I now do not like in this book I should be so busy that I would have no time to try to write new poems.

Dylan Thomas

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