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Juju
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0 posted 2004-07-31 02:13 PM



"Passing by"

I have pulled pedals off each flower
and still I have no clear conclusion.
I walked backwards through leveled mountains
while caught up in disalusions;

I can yet remember you today,
I hate when the past passes me by
like when I forget that one smile
You make when the world brings you up high.

The only time is whats passing by
Like the years that I have spent away
every moment you had my heart
Till the one day we were pulled apart

Passing by
I still try


Juju- dedicated to an old friend.

© Copyright 2004 Juju - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2004-07-31 05:36 PM


Juju, you have written your feelings very well here. Might I make a suggestion?
Do a spelling check before you post your poetry. The incorrect spelling of a word can really take away from the beauty of a poem.
Believe me - I know.
Keep on writing!! hugs, Chris

   Life itself is the most wonderful fairy tale.
                                          Hans Christian Anderson

Margherita
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2 posted 2004-07-31 07:01 PM


A heartfelt dedication!
Love, Margherita

iliana
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3 posted 2004-07-31 07:13 PM


I can tell this was from your heart, Juju.  
Juju
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4 posted 2004-07-31 08:38 PM


(: thank you that made me smile.
What did I misspell I typed it on Microsoft word???????? Spell check really stinks.

Juju

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5 posted 2004-07-31 08:50 PM


you want.. petals (as in flowers), disillusions and i'm pretty sure, what's


~~~

i really like this line
"..."when the past passes me by"

there is something about it that
keeps grabbing me on each read


snow  

"Kind words can be short and easy to speak, but their echoes are truly endless."
--Mother Teresa

Juju
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6 posted 2004-07-31 09:51 PM


Thank you for telling me... its kind of embarresing........

Thank you,
Love, Juju

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7 posted 2004-07-31 10:01 PM


please don't be embarrassed, it really does happen to everyone. just happened to me the other day and thankfully someone let me know. ;-)

hugs,
snow

"Kind words can be short and easy to speak, but their echoes are truly endless."
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8 posted 2004-07-31 11:09 PM


Juju - no, don't feel embarrassed! Heaven's I have to keep the dictionary right here at the computer 24-7 .... LOL. I just mentioned it because I know I would want someone to tell me. hugs, Chris
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9 posted 2004-08-01 04:44 AM


NIce...James
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10 posted 2004-08-01 04:52 AM


a heartfelt write here
Juju
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11 posted 2004-08-01 12:06 PM


Thank you!
Juju

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