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Dark Stranger
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since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631
West Coast

0 posted 2004-07-30 08:34 AM


you were dark water
I was neon with shadows
like sandal shoes
and black socks
but both the right size

sitting on the corner there
of accidental and
probably not
waiting for the same bus
that didn't run that day

you said you didn't need
any men or trust
them that much
or want them around
necessarily

I said I didn't too
especially for the woes
of the wo kind
most of the time
since there just wasn't time

we found an old moon
under the sky
and took turns
sleeping on it
with our eyes open

you called me god
when we made love
I said it was just sex
or a curse
depending on when

and who was believing
and you took off your skin
and showed me your heart
I called you god then
you said it was just love

or pain depending on when
or who was lying
and who was trying
we agreed we didn't need
or want or have time

but we would do it again tomorrow
_______________

Dark


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Sunshine
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Listening to every heart
1 posted 2004-07-30 08:43 AM


sitting on the corner there
of accidental and
probably not
waiting for the same bus
that didn't run that day

~*~

sounds of a perhaps day...

nakdthoughts
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since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200
Between the Lines
2 posted 2004-07-30 08:55 AM


you took off your skin
and showed me your heart
wonderful lines...
*s
M

whiskey
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since 1999-12-28
Posts 1278
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3 posted 2004-07-30 09:21 AM


Great piece very well written expressed and felt, enjoyed

"Dont cry because its over, smile because it happened. "

Gentle Spirit
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since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989

4 posted 2004-07-30 09:41 AM


smiling*  am sitting here grinnin and loving this one.

or pain depending on when
on who was lying
and who was trying
we agreed we didn't need
or want or have time

and all's I'm gonna say is
HELL YEAH!!
love it.

Susan Caldwell
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since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348
Florida
5 posted 2004-07-30 09:41 AM


"you said it was just love

or pain depending on when
on who was lying
and who was trying"

That is the most honest thing I have ever heard.  



"cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind"
~Sarah McLachlan~

LeeJ
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since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296

6 posted 2004-07-30 09:59 AM


very well done
Seymour Tabin
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since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla
7 posted 2004-07-30 10:10 AM


Dark Stranger
Well done my friend.

Susan
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since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104
walking the surreal
8 posted 2004-07-30 10:12 AM


two hearts, wanting, needing, yet reluctant to trust, to give in total.  The tentative dance of the broken in need of healing.  My interpretation.

as alway, love your work.

  susan

Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you.  Joy is a state of mind.

Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049
California
9 posted 2004-07-30 12:56 PM


DS

"and who was believing
and you took off your skin
and showed me your heart
I called you god then
you said it was just love"

Wonderful work, my friend!  

JL
Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128
Texas, USA
10 posted 2004-07-30 01:15 PM


Very powerful write.

JL



Krawdad
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Posts 2597

11 posted 2004-07-30 02:03 PM


terribly real
enjoyed

Midnitesun
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Gaia
12 posted 2004-07-30 02:18 PM


Apparently, I was always at the wrong bus stop.
What a real write, one to savor.

Dark Angel
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since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095

13 posted 2004-07-30 06:04 PM


sitting on the corner there
of accidental and
probably not
waiting for the same bus
that didn't run that day


Ahhhh Mr Dark, alway...always wonderful writing from you.

Ms D

The clouds never expect it when it rains, but the sea, changes colour, but the sea, does not change.
~Stevie Nicks~

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577
displaced
14 posted 2004-07-31 04:40 AM


at least there would be tomorrow
me, I'm in yesterday

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