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Cpat Hair
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0 posted 2004-07-29 04:00 PM



I tossed them
Now ā€œSā€ shaped in neglect till they
Resembled gnarled drawings of stem
From charcoal sketch of what should have been
Colors
Vibrant with hues of blush
Like your shoulder when I watched the dress
Slip off them and to the floor

The vase is empty my love
And I have found the space no comfort
Against sharp pointed crystal and light

One long night I dreamed
           Of fingers hushed against my lips
As the rest of me found sound
Playing straddled notes
               So low that I in subtle exhale
Left my own bass on the scale
          Crosshatched on the glass of us
And refracting light on roses

Still fresh then

Darkness adds comfort to eyes
That hide the ghosts of then

Today my love
                         I threw out the stems
And thought as I turned my head
I saw you standing there
              Bared to me
                                  Again

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Martie
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1 posted 2004-07-29 04:16 PM


Ron

Sometimes you have to throw things away in order to see what you have.  Wonderful writing again, my friend!  

miscellanea
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2 posted 2004-07-29 04:21 PM


Your title is incredibly descriptive!  I know that key...  I believe  F is the note by which alarm clocks shrilly awake us.  One of my old cars buzzed on F when the seatbelt didn't work right--oh, the discomfort...

  Fine writing, cpat.  (I am wondering how this name came about!  Everytime I write it, I have to do a double take so I don't misspell it. At first I thought it was the abbreviation for captain.  Then I realized no.  Laugh as you may, but to remember its spelling I have to think to myself "c cat run" (OLd Dick and Jane reading series!)  Then I switch the c for a p!

   Would you let us in on how you came about the name?

        

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3 posted 2004-07-29 04:28 PM


Martie my friend... thank you

Mis E... lol.. long and boring story plus I was dislexic when I typed it.. just call me Ron


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4 posted 2004-07-29 04:52 PM


Excellent write..yet again today from you Ron, sir.
Thank you for the added bonus!
Hugs~

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
Dancing with you in the summer rain ~

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5 posted 2004-07-29 04:59 PM


Ron,
  Thanks for the explanation...  I'm still dyslexic! Truly, probably am, especially when I'm tired!   An old poem of mine:

**This is written about myself in good humor (or poor as that may be) about my typo's and spelling mistakes!      

           My Spelling Airers


   Yearing, her spelling erred
   She mirrored wards back and homophones forth
   adding interest to decipher.

    
As her dear beloved friend, I told her
Weed keep the writing pu,
But she just looked at me and said,
"You've gotta be joking, Sadie, time to hang it up!"


    Sew words like clothes,
    we hung them up
    under clothes-hook's springing tension
    and erred them out online.


   (Hopefully, this poem will be the last spelling error i make for a wile!)

  

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6 posted 2004-07-29 05:14 PM


One long night I dreamed
           Of fingers hushed against my lips
As the rest of me found sound
Playing straddled notes
               So low that I in subtle exhale
Left my own bass on the scale
          Crosshatched on the glass of us
And refracting light on roses

~*~

ummmmhummmm.....

hoot_owl_rn
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7 posted 2004-07-29 06:35 PM


This poem is truly haunting...wonderful write
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8 posted 2004-07-29 07:25 PM


One long night I dreamed
           Of fingers hushed against my lips
As the rest of me found sound
Playing straddled notes
               So low that I in subtle exhale
Left my own bass on the scale
          Crosshatched on the glass of us
And refracting light on roses

Still fresh then

Darkness adds comfort to eyes
That hide the ghosts of then

=================================

You NEED to be published because I NEED to be able to hold these poems in my hands...run my fingers over the words....feel the paper, smell the ink and leather... take them and sit by the creek under a cottonwood and inhale your words...read your poetry outloud to the trees....

How can you deny the moth and the trees. lol

I would love to live as a river flows, carried by the surprise of its own unfolding.

~Fluent~
John O'Donohue

Susan Caldwell
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9 posted 2004-07-29 08:57 PM


Yes...

Paper and leather...so one can touch the beauty as well as read it...

thank you.

"cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind"
~Sarah McLachlan~

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10 posted 2004-07-29 09:04 PM


CPat~
I hope you don't mind the sound of
This is just gorgeous~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost,
the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
- Sufi epigram <))><

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11 posted 2004-07-30 02:22 AM


This is a very touching, beautifully haunting write, sir.  Into my library it goes...
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12 posted 2004-07-30 03:19 AM


always amazing
Cpat Hair
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13 posted 2004-07-30 10:35 AM


thank you all for the nice words...

they are appreciated

babygirlwlove
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14 posted 2004-10-20 08:32 AM


"Darkness adds comfort to eyes
That hide the ghosts of then"
**********************************

just wanted to pass through you...glad I did..

**just me**

**Intoxicant to the SouL**

littlewing
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15 posted 2004-10-20 09:22 AM


This sounded like a duet with Karen . . .
another one I would love to see you posting with.

Beautiful Ron

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16 posted 2004-10-22 12:58 PM


I am thinking that if I were to be your manager I could see you published with all the ladies who are dying to write to, for and with you. and make a killing!  You dorable dyslexic damper dan you are incredibly gifted.  Listen to the "Moth" will ya, she knows of what she speaks.
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17 posted 2004-10-24 05:06 PM


I don't know how I missed this amazing write, you always make me sigh Sir Ron and yanno? I love it!

Mxx

and I am haunted
by my illicit exquisite dream
but I can't really wake up
so I just drift in between

~ani difranco~

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