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Seymour Tabin
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0 posted 2004-07-28 07:11 AM


Weaving

In weaving fiction into truth
I can’t believe it’s long of tooth
The scale is weighted to the ground
Nor can I stand its cry of sound.

We’re eating to oblivion
Oblivious criterion
And will not stay a point of fix
Mankind weaves the strangest mix

And tears will not wash the sin
The apple’s rotten in the bin
The paradox has dragon’s breath
Enough of it to cause our death

I sail upon a sea of tears
The brine has caked my eyes the years
The wishing well has long since dried
And so my skin has ruffed to Hyde

The alternate my friend is love
And from within and not above



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Earth Angel
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1 posted 2004-07-28 07:21 AM


Yes, mankind does weave the strangest mix. However, yours is a Trail Mix and full of surprises!


"The paradox has dragon’s breath
Enough of it to cause our death"

~ I do not believe that Randy is going to appreciate those lines! Noosirreee!

"I sail upon a sea of tears
The brine has caked my eyes the years
The wishing well has long since dried
And so my skin has ruffed to Hyde"

~ That passage darn near brought on my own briny tears!!! Crying Into Tissue

"The alternate my friend is love
And from within and not above"

~ Both kinds of love are important for my personal sense of well-being.

All in all, I'd say you did not dream sweetly last night.

Tonight is another night, and I'll be astrally dropping by with some magic tricks up the sleeves of my vestments. You will sleep well tonight, my Sweet Sonneteer from the South!


EA

[This message has been edited by Earth Angel (07-28-2004 08:28 AM).]

Enchantress
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2 posted 2004-07-28 08:45 AM


Sy, it does sound as though Randy ate something hot and spicy before bed last night.
But, I have to agree self love comes first..
before we can love another.
~Morning hugs, tea, and I'll pour~

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
Dancing with you in the summer rain ~

scorpio
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3 posted 2004-07-28 08:47 AM


Sy your poems are a delightful mix.  Well done.

believe in what your heart feels...

Dark Stranger
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4 posted 2004-07-28 08:47 AM


master sy.....apples and dragons
by golly you have found the cure
one heals and one wounds..quite the weave sir

LeeJ
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5 posted 2004-07-28 09:10 AM


You had me at hello!!!!

Tremendous Sy...especially fond of the last two lines....which is indeed you...ahhhh, now stop that blushing, you know it's true!

Morning sir...thanks for my early morning fix of your wake up calls.


Susan Caldwell
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6 posted 2004-07-28 09:49 AM


"In weaving fiction into truth"

oh now, that is a great line!!  

Wonderful truth in this!


"cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind"
~Sarah McLachlan~

inkedgoddess
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7 posted 2004-07-28 09:56 AM


o yes......
and those last two lines, very powerful and i love and echo the response of our dear
earthangel too

Sunshine
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8 posted 2004-07-28 10:26 AM


Song of Sy is quite low and keen
ruffling feathers, and silken wings,
for scenes that seem a simple dream
I would, if I could, let him sing...

~*~

Super hugs...


Seymour Tabin
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9 posted 2004-07-28 11:07 AM


Earth Angel,
To my Angel of the north.

Nancy,
You pour I'll drink,

scorpio,
Thank you for the well done.

Dark Stranger,
It is a weave to catch spirits. LOL

LeeJ,
A poem a day keeps the apples away. LOL
Hugs, have a good one.

Susan,
So glad you enjoyed.

inkedgoddess
I'm with you on earth angels response.

Sunshine,
Well I'm singing you are my sunshine. Hugs

VAS
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10 posted 2004-07-28 11:16 AM


a rhythmic dance of words and thoughts...very fun to read, talk about weaving, you are a weaver of words

Whether on the shoal or on the shore,
I'll seek the lighthouse evermore.

Seymour Tabin
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11 posted 2004-07-28 12:17 PM


VAS
Thank you for the read and reply.

iliana
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12 posted 2004-07-28 12:51 PM


The alternate is love.  I like that.   ....jo
Startime55
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13 posted 2004-07-28 02:20 PM


You weave magic into your words and when mixed with the love in your soul they come out perfect...Wonderful read...

Seymour Tabin
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14 posted 2004-07-28 02:49 PM


iliana
I to like the alternate.

Startime55
A wonderful reply, thank you.

Krawdad
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15 posted 2004-07-28 06:12 PM


"I sail upon a sea of tears
The brine has caked my eyes the years
The wishing well has long since dried
And so my skin has ruffed to Hyde"


I like, I like

Seymour Tabin
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16 posted 2004-07-28 06:23 PM


Krawdad
I like, I like your reply.

Magnus
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17 posted 2004-07-28 10:09 PM


Sy,  is it true that practice makes perfect?
Or might the master just be able to paint
so easily that one might feel you write and
write and write some more?

Seymour Tabin
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18 posted 2004-07-28 10:27 PM


Barry,
Practice helps but everything ends, thank you my friend.

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