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All Is Fair
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All Is Fair |
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Tiersdin Member Elite
since 2000-11-17
Posts 2364east coast |
in silence we suffer want gazes meeting briefly to avoid resounding shock waves of longing in our souls your touch far too powerful to bear is ever within reach & though hearts beseech we honor one another with denial your gentle smile breaks my heart for these fingers beg to trace manly curve of lip where my own would kiss 'til emptiness filled to overflow but, no instead, we pass by acutely aware careful not to stare in case someone discerning sees this love not of you and me the saying goes, "all's fair..." thus, in silence we suffer wanting us... ~tier |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
"gazes meeting briefly to avoid resounding shock waves of longing in our souls your touch far too powerful to bear is ever within reach & though hearts beseech we honor one another with denial" Hiya Tier! The "All is fair..." concept has always resonated with reality by my hearing and I really like the "Tiersdin Twist" you put on it here.  |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Tier -- I really liked the flow of this poem. Great writing. ......jo |
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marcel Senior Member
since 2003-03-02
Posts 660az, usa |
sadly beautiful... |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
"thus, in silence we suffer wanting us..." Such a bittersweet write Tier... but oh so well penned. Much enjoyed. Hugs~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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~K~ Member
since 2004-07-27
Posts 148 |
I really like this part: in silence we suffer want gazes meeting briefly to avoid resounding shock waves of longing in our souls Good poem, very easy to relate to.  |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
marcel stole my line  |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
"all's fair..." thus, in silence we suffer wanting us..." perfectly penned longing... "cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind" |
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muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving |
this is heartbreaking, but it aches sooo good very touching write |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
in silence we suffer want gazes meeting briefly to avoid resounding shock waves of longing in our souls How sad...have known this feeling, although, sadly, he didn't feel the same. your touch far too powerful to bear is ever within reach & though hearts beseech we honor one another with denial Yes, this I know as well, and believe it is fear that denys? Fear of telling, for fear of rejection? your gentle smile breaks my heart for these fingers beg to trace manly curve of lip where my own would kiss 'til emptiness filled to overflow astounding description of a love overpowering and spiritual, enjoying the scent of his/her happiness. but, no instead, we pass by acutely aware careful not to stare in case someone discerning sees this love not of you and me the saying goes, "all's fair..." thus, in silence we suffer very very sad wanting us... ~tier the emotions in this were very powerfully projected...like you were both on a screen and I was watching. Someday, if you allow, someone will come along who will be able to participate in this great love, and you will be redefined it will be better and even more powerful perhaps not as it was but more responsibly porportioned? I hope so, in the meantime, thank you for such beauty! |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
very nicely done my friend |
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Ericc Member Elite
since 2003-01-31
Posts 4178 |
Every line stands out in beauty and perfection. Eric |
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Kaoru
since 2003-06-07
Posts 3892where the wild flowers grow |
You always make me think of soft painful whispers that you can just fall unto and love forever. |
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