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When We Waltzed
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When We Waltzed |
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Red Member
since 2000-01-01
Posts 143Ca 
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Suddenly a clear and eternal vision comes to me: We waltzed like flowers in a gentle spring breeze; the sun, our drummer and time, our foe; greenness all around us and dew in the air; white lilies and rain-drops and moments so rare. I see us now and I am awed by our brilliance, the way that we danced in blissful nescience. Softly my heart beats in reverence of beauty the beauty of flowers in sun-lights first kisses. if only we knew now what we had known then when we waltzed unaware of mortality . |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
sigh....if only's...yes, I agree, been there, under an arbor of roses, a beautiful picnic for two, at twilight under the waking stars....classical music for two...he..propped up his leg for me to lean on, while we shared our minds intimately...he was like having a very close girlfriend, one you can share your most inner thoughts with...wheww, nuff said, you took me to a time and place with your lovely words...a place of joy, a time of true love, and pure innocence. Thank you for sharing. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
"Softly my heart beats in reverence of beauty the beauty of flowers in sun-lights first kisses. if only we knew now what we had known then when we waltzed unaware of mortality" What a beautiful bittersweet write. Very much enjoyed. ~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Welcome home, Red... several layers of thought in your byplay of poem's heart |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
I hope you're back for keeps -- this is beautiful stuff! If you are, here's one guy who will make it a point to read you. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
"We waltzed like flowers in a gentle spring breeze;" ~ Delightful! "if only we knew now what we had known then when we waltzed unaware of mortality" ~ A very poignant close to your lovely poem.  EA |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Melissa~ Just a beautiful read~ Nice to see your ink~ *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
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Red Member
since 2000-01-01
Posts 143Ca |
I never really leave, I'm just quiet  Thanks for the kind responses! |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
beautiful piece glad to read you again |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Red Some of the most wonderful things happen, Suddenly. Much appreciated your poem's intent! |
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lgina Member
since 2004-07-20
Posts 52 |
we waltzed like flower in a gentle breeze. I can feel the breeze right now. Such lovely thoughts. I enjoyed this. |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Red, this was great....it even had a graceful waltz feel about it through the rhythm. Bravo! .....jo |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
Very nice. Loved the closing line.  SusanHappiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you. Joy is a state of mind. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Softly my heart beats in reverence of beauty the beauty of flowers in sun-lights first kisses. if only we knew now what we had known then when we waltzed unaware of mortality Such wistful beauty... excellent work! |
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