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Broken
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The woods

0 posted 2004-07-26 01:13 PM



FUNNY BIRD

I'm not me
I just Pretend
The me I am
Is not enough

But the me you know
I wear
So well

You dress me up
As something great
While I just want
To be myself

But Hide
I do
So well

And under this
Bravado shell
A spirit free
Who'd like to sing

But silence
I know
So well

It fills me with a longing
So strong
It draws the air
Out of my chest

Yet still
I breathe
So well

But hiding in silence
Pretending to sing
Is tearing me apart

So well

[This message has been edited by Broken (07-26-2004 11:42 PM).]

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Copperbell
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since 2003-11-08
Posts 956

1 posted 2004-07-26 02:32 PM


I think its an epidemic

I really like your poem - this describes the me I'm used to being - but I'm learning how to sing.

I've discovered I can actually sing and I love it and the me who I am is enough

You have no idea how relevant this poem is to me, thanks for sharing

Nightshade
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just out of reach
2 posted 2004-07-26 03:57 PM


Interesting write. Enjoyed.
Has anyone ever told you that in your pic, you look similar to David Copperfield the magician? That's a good thing.

   Life itself is the most wonderful fairy tale.
                                          Hans Christian Anderson

Susan
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3 posted 2004-07-26 09:53 PM


Ah, try having multiple me's, one to fit a variety of friends and family.  Ha, but not so any longer.  I am learning to be the truth of me and leave others to their own conclusions.  I liked the thoughts behind this.

susan

Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you.  Joy is a state of mind.

Midnitesun
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Gaia
4 posted 2004-07-26 10:35 PM


you share your wings with many who feel much the same

thanks for sharing this

Enchantress
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5 posted 2004-07-26 10:47 PM


Extremely well done and much enjoyed.
Hugs~

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
Dancing with you in the summer rain ~

iliana
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since 2003-12-05
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6 posted 2004-07-26 11:24 PM


"And under this
Bravado shell
A spirit free
Who'd like to sing"

Broken, you expressed yourself "so well."

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