»
Archives
»
Open Poetry #33
»
Iron Bar
| Open Poetry #33 |
|
Iron Bar |
|
|
ice Member Elite
since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404Pennsylvania |
The grip of leather polishes the shaft A foot down, black becomes silver On iron rods that ache for execution, Of earth-bones buried in the ground; To clear a gape, this brutish sword Is falled (to make a shape) cylindrical. * No matter where a fencemen roams His probe is sure to find a stone. So here or there where posts must go, He derricks steel (above the O) To strike at jags of buried flint And ribs of hidden granite; Making fire in the hole. * Then the digger-man clams out the shards, Until a solid thunk! slows down his motion; Steps him back to grab the iron bar To disengage the goons, that block the cave From voiding deeper, further downwards. |
||
| © Copyright 2004 ford hume - All Rights Reserved | |||
Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Interesting write, title too. Seems this is about a quarry being cleared...or perhaps an area for a skyscrapers foundation to be laid into the ground....not sure. But did enjoy the visions it gave. |
||
|
Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Very interesting read Ford. You have quite the knack of writing clear imagery. Much enjoyed the read. Hugs~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
||
|
iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Ice - This was great! Excellent write! |
||
|
iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Ford, I just had to come back to read the fine imagery in this one again. (And, I forgot to click my library button.) *bunches of hugs*.....jo |
||
|
Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
dug a good many post holes... and you set it to imagery that allows the reader to take further in metaphor if they wish or to simple enjoy the imagery |
||
|
Startime55 Member Elite
since 2003-04-05
Posts 2148Alberta, Canada |
A stunning vision brought to life from words that make one feel and see what each heart reads in your words. Considering the fact that I have been visiting old coal towns and shafts of the Rocky Mountains your words gave me a renewed vision of them....Very well written...I love it when the words of a poet brings a vision to life in me.... |
||
|
ice Member Elite
since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404Pennsylvania |
Just now getting around to thank everyone for reading and the replies...  Thank You In my buisness,(Landscaping) I sometimes install custom fencing, and of course post holes must be dug...In the part of Pennsylvania where I live the earth is bony, and I find a rock in every hole...It's then I reach for the "iron bar" again, thank you all for reading --------ice ><> |
||
|
Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Amazing how one's lot in life leads to imagery that carries on with such grace... I've "landscaped" myself, when fixing fence, and digging new postholes... a difference of 'scape, for sure, but still, you made yours very "here, there" for me.  |
||
|
Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
ice Need I say there are all kinds of stones. LOL Well done. |
||
|
Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
I've felt that jarring thud of stone, and also the relief when the post sets cleanly. A wonderfully creative write, Ford.  |
||
|
ice Member Elite
since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404Pennsylvania |
Dang! Didn't think this would get bumped up...? Thank you all for the wonderful replies, It has made this Sunday morning special....:-) -------ice ><> |
||
|
Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Wonderful imagery, Ford, for a task of muscle and sweat....I could feel the joy of doing something the right way. Well done! |
||
|
Copperbell Senior Member
since 2003-11-08
Posts 956 |
much enjoyed as well |
||
|
Startime55 Member Elite
since 2003-04-05
Posts 2148Alberta, Canada |
Your vision comes alive as the words flow perfectly...Wonderful writing... |
||
|
ice Member Elite
since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404Pennsylvania |
Martie....Copperbell....Startime Thank you for reading and your kind replies >>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>> <<<<<<<<<<<<<<<<<<<<<-------ice ><> |
||
|
passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
a lesson for life here |
||
|
|
⇧ top of page ⇧ |
|
| All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format. | ||
