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CMGrimm
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0 posted 07-25-2004 09:23 AM       View Profile for CMGrimm   Email CMGrimm   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for CMGrimm

i see him sitting
outside the main
floor
on a small bench
next to the escalators

he hangs his
head and covers
his face with his
hands

he grips the
front of his hair
and pulls and looks
up

i can see the agony
of defeat in his eyes
i can see the despair
and the anger

and i can see the fear

he looks around
at all the people
passing by
and then stares
again
at his shoes

then he stands
walks to the
escalators and makes
his way up
away from the floor
and back to his
family

wondering all the while
on that long lonely
trip home

how's he gonna tell
her he lost the
rent money again.
© Copyright 2004 Christopher M. Grimm - All Rights Reserved
Sunshine
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1 posted 07-25-2004 09:29 AM       View Profile for Sunshine   Email Sunshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Sunshine's Home Page   View IP for Sunshine

A good write, CM.  Honest portrayal of yet another addiction.  Well done.
scorpio
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right...there


2 posted 07-25-2004 09:56 AM       View Profile for scorpio   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for scorpio

This is a gripping write. And a story that happens daily.  Well done Chris.

believe in what your heart feels...

Earth Angel
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3 posted 07-25-2004 09:56 AM       View Profile for Earth Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Earth Angel's Home Page   View IP for Earth Angel

This aches...really, really aches. I could feel the pain right down to my own shoes.

A very emotional read. My heart breaks for all those whose lives are torn apart by addiction. You truly captured the essence of this with your descriptive writing.


EA

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4 posted 07-25-2004 11:31 AM       View Profile for Magnus   Email Magnus   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Magnus

This is so true...could be lottery tickets
as well,  or drug abuse/addiction...alcohol,
any number of other things...Online betting,
ad nauseum....  You penned it very well.
Thanx for the reminder,  hopefully someone
will learn from these words and seek the
help needed to overcome.  For it is never,
or very seldom ever done alone.
Jes
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5 posted 07-25-2004 11:47 AM       View Profile for Jes   Email Jes   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Jes

Hi Criss

Nice work here, i love when poetry has the power to giev an imagination to the reader a picture of the scene, i saw this mann sitting on taht bench with his hands up against his head i even imagined he had a black leather jacket black trouses and an open dark shirt on.

Good work here.

Smile

Jes

Life is for me to be - but always with a smile !

passing shadows
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6 posted 07-25-2004 12:40 PM       View Profile for passing shadows   Email passing shadows   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for passing shadows

wow...this write hits hard...

I know I would get addicted to the casino if I ever went and took it seriously. That's why I don't go.
Enchantress
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7 posted 07-25-2004 01:24 PM       View Profile for Enchantress   Email Enchantress   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Enchantress

Hi Chris.
Excellent write with vivid imagery.
Unfortunately living in a city with a casino I see and hear of this sort of happening far too frequently.  Well done poet sir!
Hugs~

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Dancing with you in the summer rain ~

iliana
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8 posted 07-25-2004 01:50 PM       View Profile for iliana   Email iliana   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for iliana

Chris -- great writing, really kept me reading; I could almost hear his silent sceam!
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9 posted 07-25-2004 04:43 PM       View Profile for Snow   Email Snow   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Snow's Home Page   View IP for Snow

ohhh chris... this made my heart feel so heavy..... well done!!!

snow

"Kind words can be short and easy to speak, but their echoes are truly endless."
--Mother Teresa

CMGrimm
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10 posted 07-25-2004 09:39 PM       View Profile for CMGrimm   Email CMGrimm   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for CMGrimm

thanks everybody

Never be a carbon copy of anybody...make your own impressions.  - ANON.


dgvarner
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11 posted 01-16-2006 02:53 PM       View Profile for dgvarner   Email dgvarner   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for dgvarner

I just love the way you tell a story...

enjoyed!

hugs, g

"We of the craft are all crazy...all are more or less touched."  Lord Byron

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12 posted 01-16-2006 04:43 PM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

DG~
Thanking YOU for the bounty of this harvest of one of my favorites inkers~

Chris~
EXCELLENT penning, my friend~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*The sound of a kiss is not as strong as that of a cannon, but it's echo endures much longer*~
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Artic Wind
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13 posted 10-27-2007 05:42 PM       View Profile for Artic Wind   Email Artic Wind   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Artic Wind

thank you for a this sharing
good write

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