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Magnus
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0 posted 2004-07-24 09:48 PM


I see you staring at me,  
though I feel I don’t know
who you are.  

You often are called names only
my elders once heard....Things like
Sir and Ma’am.

Your hair is so sparse, leaving enough
space for a landing strip.  A hat, you
say?

Your hands, showing the spots that
were not there before, the skin no
longer smooth and tight...

Your thoughts, sometimes wandering
or forgetting the last thought you had.

Your taste,   sometimes dulled slightly,
as the spices become heavier over time.
Your sunny side up eggs sprinkled
darkly with pepper.

You no longer sprint like a gazelle,
or walk proudly as would a male lion
protecting it’s pride.

Your pride, once strong, resilient, now
content to acceptance...often wondering
if a smile given was genuine or simply
empathy.

Even the little blue pill doesn’t do everything
you thought it would....though you have
the heart and desire that beats ever strong, a
torrent of passion flowing your veins.
For naught?

Who are you?  You, the wise one....now so
filled with that which you never had when
you were like me.   Like me....oh yes,   I
forgot...you are me.    And, just one favor,
don’t call me sir all the time.  Maybe
twenty years from now...I think that is
next week.


© Copyright 2004 Barry J. Tackett - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2004-07-24 09:52 PM


Yes, Sir, won't call you Sir, Sir...No Sir, won't go against the grain, Sir...

This, from a "Ma'am".

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2 posted 2004-07-24 09:58 PM


Magnus~
I sit here *smiling* at the screen ... applauding your talent~

You, kind (ummm ...) poet, are a treat~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost,
the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
- Sufi epigram <))><

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3 posted 2004-07-24 10:14 PM


Thanx Marge,  I noticed the crafty dodge
away from the dreaded "S" word...sorta like
the "M" word that our loving Sun happened
to mention just above your comment...

I have a few thoughts for her,  but I cannot
share them here upon the blue....something
like smartypants...or some other smart word.

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4 posted 2004-07-24 10:17 PM


"Your pride, once strong, resilient, now
content to acceptance...often wondering
if a smile given was genuine or simply
empathy."

Barry, I don't know about your pride, but you can tell that "wise one" that he should be proud of his writing, for, honestly and without empathy, he writes beautifully.   ....jo


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5 posted 2004-07-24 10:21 PM


Jo,  I will mention that to him the next
time I see him....maybe tomorrow morning
when I tell him to get cleaned up and
brush his hair, or was that hairs?  

Thanx...

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6 posted 2004-07-24 11:14 PM


You are too cute, Barry!
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7 posted 2004-07-24 11:39 PM


Kiss the mirror for me!


EA

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8 posted 2004-07-24 11:53 PM


Linda,  I will.....after I get the fog and
the toothpaste off of it....I think that
was toothpaste?  

Thanx EA....

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9 posted 2004-07-25 02:05 AM


eggs sprinkled darkly with pepper?  Oh no! I've got the syndrome!!!  I love the way you write boldly with gentleness.
               misc'e

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10 posted 2004-07-25 03:38 AM


where I work, there are doctors, judges, police officers, high ranking military, etc...they all like to be called by their titles

it's a heck of a lot to remember with over 500 families in the community but I guess I manage okay

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11 posted 2004-07-25 07:33 AM


LOL...watch out, SIR, or we'll have to revive the stickybun issue...


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12 posted 2004-07-25 08:49 AM


I like this definition of the word best of all..and by it call you "sir"

From Webster's (1913) Dictionary
Definition:   \Sir\,
1. A man of social authority and dignity; a lord; a master; a gentleman; --

Love the poem and can relate..

------ice
  ><>



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13 posted 2004-07-25 09:55 AM


Misc'e...  Thanx, and yep,  looks like you
may have it...

Dix.  I know you dear,  and have no doubt
that you would do well remembering all that
there might ever be...

Sun....what sticky buns?  OH....those sticky
buns....have you been sitting in syrup lately?  hehe....Yes Ma'am....fire when
ready....

Ice,  you are right....I guess I could
accept it under those circumstances....

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14 posted 2004-07-25 09:58 AM


Ah, I see that you see "Sir" as a title of the aged.  Where I come from it is a title of respect and of admiration.  Perhaps that is the martial arts within me.  It is a title of the Gallant, for the Knights of old were titled "Sir".  It is one letter short of "Sire", the title of most noble blood.  For me, should I use "Sir", it is reserved for those to whom I feel great tenderness.  So you see, it is all in the heart behind the word, rather than the word itself.  So know if I call you "Sir" and you know I do, this then is where it springs from.  For you, Sir, have a heart most gallant, tender, and words of the greatest beauty.  See -- "Sir" isn't all bad  . . .

  Susan

Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you.  Joy is a state of mind.

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15 posted 2004-07-25 10:03 AM


Susan,  I knew this would draw something
out of the depths of you,  for you have
many times called me sir,  and I know or
knew why...and I do appreciate the thoughts
and feelings that you speak of,  the desire
to use such a title under the circumstance.

You, fair maid...thee art most kind and for
thy efforts thee shall always be a gem most
kind to me...and I shall never quibble over
being called Sir....

Thanx Susan....

And you should carry the title of "Lady"...
for this is a title deserving of one who
has the respect of another as well...

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16 posted 2004-07-25 10:20 AM


Barry --

Thank you for your kindness, and I am glad that you are aware of the intent behind my use of the word, for truly it is so.

  Susan

Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you.  Joy is a state of mind.

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17 posted 2004-07-25 10:36 AM


An interesting and very genuine write...as always.
You do know, that within the body resides the eternal child...and yes, change comes...but the spirit does not age...not ever
TD

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18 posted 2004-07-25 10:43 AM


I must protest, for the word "Sir", is not used for the years you may or may not have accumulated, but for the mastery of your writings.  Superb poem.          
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19 posted 2004-07-25 11:02 AM


K.  you always have a way of coming out with
what is wise, truthful and so meaningful.
Remind me again one day when the true meaning
of "Sir" escapes me once again.  

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20 posted 2004-07-25 11:03 AM


INot2B....

Thanx,  I do agree with you and all the
others....sometimes we forget who we are
to others...and a gentle though firm
reminder is in order....

Thanx again.

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21 posted 2004-07-25 06:59 PM


I am so oblivious that I have been known to forget my own age. (literally--this is the third year that I am forty-three!)

*chuckle*

But I've read this several times and you left me bemused as I pondered how often the face in the mirror doesn't match the feeling inside.

Somedays that's a good thing, somedays not.

Mostly I just find it startling.

(and I waited to reply, trying to be the last.... )

Hugs Barry!

I enjoyed muchly, but then, I always do.

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22 posted 2004-07-25 07:08 PM


Karen,  thanx Ser.  You are a dear,  even
though you and I share one common trait,
being very very close to the Psych Ward...
(kidding)....

Always enjoy your replies,  for they seldom
do not bring a laugh or a wry grin....they
always do!!!

I know what you mean about forgetting,  
forgetting what?...Oh well,  someday I will
remember...and you tried hard to not be
first...

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23 posted 2004-07-25 07:10 PM


laughing here--how did you know?

I just changed my signature!

and just for you, I will share it with you--first--

"some days it's just not worth chewing through the leather straps in the morning..."

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24 posted 2004-07-25 07:57 PM


I'm going to spend the next 6 years of my life wishing I were older... then I'll be ma'am.... O boy... Great write.
                *Allison*

~~~***~~~Come away with me, Wendy. Come away to Neverland~~~***~~~

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25 posted 2004-07-25 08:03 PM


Allison,  I'll give you six of mine and then
you can be Ma'am TODAY~

thanx for the comment,  appreciated.

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26 posted 2004-07-25 08:39 PM


Very Barry

You know, to me you are very Barry...but others may call you other things...but I'm sure that "sir" is used as respect, not old age.  Yep, because you are deserving of just that...respect!  So there!  

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27 posted 2004-07-25 08:52 PM


Ahhhh Party Martie is alive....waking up from
the west coast of the YOU ES OF A.....

Thanx Dear one,  I know, I know....

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28 posted 2004-07-26 08:46 AM


Well done SIR!!!  


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29 posted 2004-07-26 11:24 AM


LOL, can I just ditto Ron's reply?
You, SIR, are a wonderful gift we appreciate here in the blue.

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30 posted 2004-07-26 07:08 PM


Ah but your words prove that your heart and soul beat strongly in a world where you are forever the young warrior who rescues the maiden and makes hearts old and young alike beat a pattern of romance that fills their thoughts with dreams and visions. How you doing, my friend....**hugs**

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