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Legends, Seasoned, Swirling – Part 2
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Legends, Seasoned, Swirling – Part 2 |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart 
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Legends, Seasoned, Swirling – Part 2 Somewhere, it was me, there, In your neck of the woods Where green became darker, The woods thicker, Corn taller, land crept higher, When the water was calling And the skies… Were painted with faces. I thought of canoes, and rivers, Wanting to stop for a moment, Any moment, And say I’m here… Can you hear me? But you were too busy with frames, Main and otherwise, Too tired of re-organizing amassed confusion, Somewhere time lost your number And all I saw, Were your trees, and rivers, Lakes And skies painted with faces. I saw your part of the world That makes you write, as you do, As black clouds traveled on thunderously, Destined, as always, easterly… While the sun raised high Casting shadow faces Southerly. I saw your grand, And my silhouettes lost All selves, As the corn rustled, come in. |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Karilea......I'm supposed to be working but could not resist peaking through the corn field......This touched me so deeply and from what I am learning of you as a person and a poetess, I can see the depth from which it came from your enormously beautiful heart. I am in awe! luv ya, jo |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
ok... lie to me... tell me you had this laying around ... good grief...I just replied to the last one asking for part 2... and ....... yayayayyayaya sheesh.... I'd kill for such a fluent muse.  |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
funny... how the land around us plays into our words and the way we express ourselves... I came from someplace south of where i am now.. and am absolutely still wrapped in the imagery and the feel of those deep narrow valleys and cold streams... surrounded by stone and tree... nicely done... and too bad the numbers get lost along the way... |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
My gosh you possess amazing talent lady. The imagery and thoughts here are wonderful!! Hugs~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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Snow
since 2000-10-16
Posts 1170desert flower looking for rain |
that closing is simply perfect!!! snow "Kind words can be short and easy to speak, but their echoes are truly endless." |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
Stirring write. As always, you draw the reader in for a wonderful journey. Excellent read… JL  She said: ”You look cute in the dark.” |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
*~coco~* |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Karilea How did I miss this amazing piece of you? So glad it came back.  |
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