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inkedgoddess
Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392
Ohio

0 posted 2004-07-23 03:43 PM



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I took her out today;
from the racks of storage
where she waits for days like these,
as i get to wear her face again
freshened with generic paint,
nothing abrasive, intrusive, or inflicting pain;
carefull not to offend,
just let her smile a happy face grin,

i took her out today;
her cookie cutter complacency
docile ,sqeaky clean, depersonalized
as a form letter, surely she'd
be the better me
to fit in life's formalities like these;

i took her out today;
shes coverup for the
superficialities of piercings and skin that's inked,
to the plagues of childhood shame and
later day sins of adultery, among
other maladies of a taintedflowergirl
like me;

i took her out today;
to impress a bunch of bible fearing hypocrits wearing the red white and blue badge of americana that surely have their own share of imperfections in their own personas,

i took her out today;
and felt sorry for the kent state 4 and the columbines and the
castrated minds of kindergarten rebels that dared to color cows outside their natural lines
and wondered if the world could truly ever be
at peace?????????????????????????????????

© Copyright 2004 inkedgoddess - All Rights Reserved
Jes
Member
since 2003-10-21
Posts 422
Denmark
1 posted 2004-07-23 03:59 PM


Hi there

Dont we all wonder if teh world ever would get to peace.

I think it never will be, cause there will always be some that want more.

Made one think alot.

Smile

Jes


JL
Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128
Texas, USA
2 posted 2004-07-23 04:05 PM


I think you hit on something that is on a lot of people's minds.

We do have HOPE!

Thanks for sharing your thoughts.

JL

She said: ”You look cute in the dark.”


iliana
Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434
USA
3 posted 2004-07-23 04:17 PM


Great poem, Inked One!  Oh, yes! Loved it!  Keep her out!  
Snow
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Posts 1170
desert flower looking for rain
4 posted 2004-07-23 05:16 PM


ok this is being saved.


snow

"Kind words can be short and easy to speak, but their echoes are truly endless."
--Mother Teresa

CMGrimm
Senior Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 685
USA
5 posted 2004-07-25 10:40 AM


i love this one... i LOVE this one...

chris

Never be a carbon copy of anybody...make your own impressions.  - ANON.



ice
Member Elite
since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404
Pennsylvania
6 posted 2004-07-25 12:27 PM


A theme of rough edges, truthful, rebelious
Just like I like 'em...

When people chastize others, I know they are hiding their private lives behind curtains.

In the company of these I become Tonto,
by imagination, peek behind their masks
And find they don't have the pure integrity
Or morals of the Lone Ranger.

Well done, Inky
enjoyed the read
-------ice
  ><>

passing shadows
Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577
displaced
7 posted 2004-07-25 12:32 PM


I dunno girlfriend...I just don't know

your write sure made me think

inkedgoddess
Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392
Ohio
8 posted 2004-07-25 12:37 PM


thanks for stopping by
Earth Angel
Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215
Realms of Light
9 posted 2004-07-25 03:58 PM


I like this "you" as well!

This was a fun and spirited read!


EA

bklynboy
Senior Member
since 2002-12-15
Posts 660
florida
10 posted 2004-07-25 05:54 PM


This was a very different Inked one. Not bad at all.
ThisDiamond
Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353
Michigan, USA
11 posted 2004-07-25 08:54 PM


Glad I found this one Michelle...
So sharp and so expertly you...
I admire you a great deal through your works, and appreciate your talent, your honesty and your wonderful style.
TD

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