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whiskey
since 1999-12-28
Posts 1278Australia 
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Roses grew out side the window I remember the scent Drifting in from the garden Stuck seated on the sofa You know it is not you I couldnt fault you ever You spoke in words So distant unimportant Their meaning seemed In a day dream smelling roses I sat unable to snap out Of my conscious Mixed babble overflowing your lips Motionless not moving It seemed liked hours went past In minutes That turned into seconds A voice incased in a body Unable to escape to respond To your speach of seperation I sat One moment I could see you Over there on the other chair Telling me your hearts feelings Next you vanished gone Like a great magician Preforming a trick Not noticed not seen Removed from sight I stood up The scent of roses No longer Neither you "Dont cry because its over, smile because it happened. " |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Dear Whiskey, I suppose it is time to plant a garden of gardenias! Some say the scent is even sweeter!  EA |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
voice incased in a body Unable to escape to respond To your speach of seperation I sat always nice to read your words, Julie, and to feel their meaning. M |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
good write...I can relate |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
"Motionless not moving It seemed liked hours went past In minutes That turned into seconds" It's been a long time since I've had the chance to read you!  a very sad write....done so well  |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
time stops and even fades when you've lost a love...very poignant and sad Hugs |
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Ceinwyn Member Elite
since 2000-07-09
Posts 2175VA |
heartfelt indeed... If at first you don't succeed destroy all the evidence that you tried. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Excellent write Julie..very much enjoyed. Hugs~ |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Nice writing....James |
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lgina Member
since 2004-07-20
Posts 52 |
I really enjoyed this write. I could feel the words and went with every feeling. I like your style. Can't wait to read the next one. |
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CMGrimm Senior Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 685USA |
very very nice ... i love it thank you Never be a carbon copy of anybody...make your own impressions. - ANON. |
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