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0 posted 2004-07-20 08:54 AM


park, ducks


                                     me
                  the ducks
none of us with
      anyplace         to go

they have greater range
                             not
              too shy            to swim
                         and free
                 from              all this
remembering

they know where
               bread        comes
                 they crowd to it

        two          watchful
    crows like border collies
    at the                    edges

          together is natural
         for them    how they
            always are here

  they         have             the
                  edge
  on             me           there
                   too     don’t they

all of them
                       agree
  flap sudden                                out
              across the lake and gone
  
even the                        feathers
         they left behind won’t
                                            help me
                              do
                  that

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1 posted 2004-07-20 08:59 AM


Sounds like a very lonely day in the park.

May your wings fly you wherever you wish to go...


EA

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2 posted 2004-07-20 09:07 AM


Ed~
Sounds to me that you were at Mile Square Park and soooooooo inspired~

The layering of thought ... expertly displayed~

I couldn't help but think of 'foul play' ...
um, make that 'fowl play'~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

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the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
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3 posted 2004-07-20 09:08 AM


many hugs...

this was awesome!  Your soul will fly with them Ed...how in the world could it not...just a mood your allowing to prevale...but in your great awareness, you will be once again healed...love to you

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4 posted 2004-07-20 09:13 AM




park, ducks
and one smile...
knowing...

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5 posted 2004-07-20 09:40 AM


nicely done sir. While the ducks may indeed have some advantages... they don't write, and you do, which gives you one up on them.


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6 posted 2004-07-20 10:01 AM


Ed

To long for that simple life of ducks....sometimes I do too!  

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7 posted 2004-07-20 12:19 PM


the golf course where I work has ducks all over the front lake...we feed them at the guard shack...I watch them make their way and often think the same thing
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8 posted 2004-07-20 05:21 PM


          together is natural
         for them    how they
            always are here

  they         have             the
                  edge
  on             me           there
                   too     don’t they

Oh, my friend... once again your format adds another wonderful dimension to your words... the reader experiences your drift and lack of direction AND the forlornness... This is absolutely excellent!!



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9 posted 2004-07-20 05:25 PM


Sad isn't it Ed....when the ducks have the
upper hand...such simple pleasures and
the ability to fly away from it all....

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10 posted 2004-07-20 05:33 PM


This is achingly lovely, Ed.

The construction of it played out a certain quality of faltering thought of alone and yet yearning that struck inner chords for me.

I enjoyed this very much.

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