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Dark Stranger
Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631
West Coast

0 posted 2004-07-20 08:30 AM



it was after the dawn
as I remember
some monday
when you said hello
and told me about the watchers
that sat like icons
on a bird wire
or like passing shadows
stuck in lonely grooves

you said they made messes
on my whore jacket
with their droppings
I said it wasn't mine
I had just found it
and it was warmer
than the nude air
on my tattoos
you said nude was ketchup

I wondered if you had time
to know me that way
or if you would lose interest
when you saw the dots
from too many pens
connected with too many again
like the lines of a road
that went too many miles
but you were older than me

you dreamed your wrench fit
and you took the time to adjust it
soft jawed you loosened my tight
and tightened me loosely
we were jigsaw dogs then
chasing cars in the junkyard
I scratched your soul
under the bumper
of a drunk old chevy

and broke your cowboy boot halo

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Ceinwyn
Member Elite
since 2000-07-09
Posts 2175
VA
1 posted 2004-07-20 08:57 AM


is it too early to get my fix!?

If at first you don't succeed destroy all the evidence that you tried.

Susan
Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104
walking the surreal
2 posted 2004-07-20 09:02 AM


I just love the feel of your work.  I too am glad for the early morning fix   

Susan

Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you.  Joy is a state of mind.

LeeJ
Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296

3 posted 2004-07-20 09:02 AM


I wondered if you had time
to know me that way
or if you would lose interest
when you saw the dots
from too many pens
connected with too many again
like the lines of a road
that went too many miles
but you were older than me

I can hardly believe after reading you that
she would ever ose interest?  Not to mention, those dots, well, simply, it is impossible to connect them all without the mentor of companionship to each other...and so...her insight will grace you with an understanding smile.

Love to you both

rwood
Member Elite
since 2000-02-29
Posts 3793
Tennessee
4 posted 2004-07-20 09:25 AM


You rub up against everything I don't have words for yet. But I'll try, every time, to find them.

"broke your cowboy boot halo"

There's not a spare one either.

Love,
Reg

Cpat Hair
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Member Patricius
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793

5 posted 2004-07-20 09:36 AM


well done sir.. well done indeed.
passing shadows
Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577
displaced
6 posted 2004-07-20 12:27 PM


nice...mmmm
Beki
Senior Member
since 1999-09-15
Posts 1569
Newport Beach, CA, USA
7 posted 2004-07-21 03:09 AM


"we were jigsaw dogs then
chasing cars in the junkyard
I scratched your soul
under the bumper
of a drunk old chevy"

what original imagery - I like this

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