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Rick
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0 posted 2004-07-19 08:20 AM



Every thought I try to share
They run within me everywhere
So many that I often find
A storm is brewing in my mind

I’ve day to day, the normal things
The tests that every moment brings
I’ve got my dreams that give me hope
While draining strengths that help me cope

I share my child, this fragile mind
In hope that all will treat it kind
I write of things that in me rave
By way of word that helps to save

I live the life of normal man
And doing with it best I can
I’m kind to all who wish to share
And find a vision’s coat to wear

So camouflaged the truth I seek
Till findings with my words all speak
Of day to day of life and time
Of feelings that with words combine

© Copyright 2004 Rick Van Weenen - All Rights Reserved
Elizabeth Santos
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1 posted 2004-07-19 08:30 AM


You have found a "vision's coat to wear" this morning
Great line!
Liz

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2 posted 2004-07-19 08:30 AM


"So camouflaged the truth I seek
Till findings with my words all speak
Of day to day of life and time
Of feelings that with words combine"

~ I feel the words you speak of day to day of life and time. Visions from a "normal" man are so real and identifiable by your readers, Rick!

I do so enjoy that mind child of yours!

Love & Poetic Light,
Linda

Rick
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3 posted 2004-07-19 08:42 AM


Dear Liz, great to see you, it is funny how some lines just come to you and you like them, it just worked, thank you so much for the comment dear friend. I did the couple of clicks for you, good luck to her.

Dear Linda, my friend, the words are the mist that lies above my pool of reality, I dare not drive too deeply, there might be too much to find, we all as poets seek a vision, seeing through the mist is often enough for the light beyond appears as a rainbow. The poetic light.
Thank you so much for sharing your thoughts and time, so much appreciated dear friend.

To you both my friends, again thank you.

Sincerely
Rick

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4 posted 2004-07-19 12:58 PM


I am glad you are here and sharing


Sunshine
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5 posted 2004-07-19 01:20 PM


So camouflaged the truth I seek
Till findings with my words all speak

Of day to day of life and time
Of feelings that with words combine


Bravo!

LeeJ
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6 posted 2004-07-19 01:21 PM


outstanding optimisum...

word has it that your life is not as simple as you lead us to believe, yup, yup yup, they say you wrestle alligators, and hunt venemous snakes...and over there they call you Outback Rick, the Aussie whom all the girls swoon over...

Smiles and hugs...you are always a joy to read

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7 posted 2004-07-19 05:31 PM


Always enjoy your writings Rick.
hugs, Chris

   Life itself is the most wonderful fairy tale.
                                          Hans Christian Anderson

vandana
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8 posted 2004-07-19 05:33 PM


enjoyed
JL
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9 posted 2004-07-19 05:44 PM


Absolutely wonderful write!

JL



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10 posted 2004-07-19 05:53 PM


Another wonderful write by you my friend.
Much enjoyed the read.
~Hugs & Smiles, Nancy~

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
Dancing with you in the summer rain ~

catalinamoon
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11 posted 2004-07-19 10:36 PM


This is a lovely write.
Sandra

Rick
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12 posted 2004-07-20 09:21 AM


To you all again my friends, my deepest thank you goes, always wonderful to see you all reply, thank you for sharing your moments and replies. All be well and take care till next we meet.

Sincerely
Rick

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