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ethome
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since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada

0 posted 2004-07-18 04:14 PM



Got a little rhyme difference in the builds but it doesn't affect the mood or music of this as I feel it.


Autumn leaves cover the lawn
A naked maple's clothes
They rustle in the breeze at dawn
Warning of  the coming cold
Just like them our time had come
To drop the romance we'd outgrown

(build)
This ol house became our first care
Painting rooms making repairs
Key's still there under the mat
Near the porch chairs where we sat

Chorus:
But I get like this sometimes
Thinking bout you fills my mind
Your black hair and your red lips
The scent of you when we kissed
Your fancy soaps in the shower
Making love, talking for hours

Kitchen looks so bare at breakfast
Eatin toast makes a lonely crunch
A voiceless time but who'd guess
We'd grow tired of being one
And we tried hard to make the best
Of what was left of our lost love

(build 2)
Last year we vacationed camping
Sang songs by the fire beautifully
But the whole thing left us hanging
Without love, just friends in need

Chorus:
But I get like this sometimes
Thinking bout you fills my mind
Your black hair and your red lips
The scent of you when we kissed
Your fancy soaps in the shower
Making love, talking for hours

Wind chimes ring on the patio
Your image drifts out of sight
Took the long way but now we know
Sometimes lovers aren't for life
Birds in the feeder come and go
And I feel alone but I'm alright

(build 3)
I'll miss all the holidays
But who knew when we started
Years later we would change
And fate would find us parted

Chorus:
But I get like this sometimes
Thinking bout you fills my mind
Your black hair and your red lips
The scent of you when we kissed
Your fancy soaps in the shower
Making love, talking for hours

Ain't doin nothin at all
Just answerin the call
Kinda driftin away from it all~~~~~

© Copyright 2004 Eric Lewis True - All Rights Reserved
Seymour Tabin
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since 1999-07-07
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Tamarac Fla
1 posted 2004-07-18 04:37 PM


ethome,
Delightful lyrics, enjoyed the read.

Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354
Listening to every heart
2 posted 2004-07-18 04:41 PM


A ballad for the times well spent,
but lost to change...

well done, m'friend...

thank you for this song.

Kahlil
Senior Member
since 2003-04-12
Posts 1881

3 posted 2004-07-18 04:46 PM


This is a beautiful sentiment, Eric.
A song of acceptance and love.
~K~

iliana
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since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434
USA
4 posted 2004-07-18 05:03 PM


Oh, yes, I think....absence makes the heart grow fonder.  Good write.......jo
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