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Sweetening Plumeria

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James_A_Fraser
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Sweetening Plumeria

    As your hair
                  falls
          shimmering disarray
          you catch the
soft      yellowwhite    star
    where it would
           fall from
                       behind
  your ear      wave the blossom
             close
     tempt me     the scent
                like
         dreams of    honey rain
  sets my eyes         adrift
      on         island of
            flowers

      As the warm
                    breeze
          combs          you would
   replace it    there
            then                  pause
          suddenly demure
    secret           smile
  open silk from
          one        button
           then       two
     tuck it    safe into
         a sweeter
                 home


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Listening to every heart


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Uh-oh....I think I just caught myself peeking in on a very private moment...but smiling as I tiptoe away...
Kahlil
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oo-hoo....sweet, indeed...
~K~
Martie
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3 posted 07-18-2004 10:50 AM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

Jamie

Very gently told, this love story.  
miscellanea
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OH


4 posted 07-18-2004 11:07 AM       View Profile for miscellanea   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for miscellanea

      dreams of    honey rain
  sets my eyes         adrift
      on         island of
            flowers

Just an example from your exquisite poem to illustrate what happens to this reader.  You used the word "adrift," and with your format allowed the eyes to "drift" through the dreams of honey rain, the island, the flowers, (not in any particular order, but in somewhat of a circular or looping motion).
The same happened with the word breeze.  I like your poetry because it lends itself to continuance and savoring.
               misc'e
Susan
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5 posted 07-18-2004 11:43 AM       View Profile for Susan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Susan

I am there, smelling the scent, touched by the breeze, caught in the romance of the moment, and sighing . . .

  Susan

Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you.  Joy is a state of mind.

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6 posted 07-18-2004 11:46 AM       View Profile for Enchantress   Email Enchantress   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Enchantress

This is a very loving gentle sigh Jamie.
A very tender moment indeed.
Hugs~

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
Dancing with you in the summer rain ~

iliana
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I thought misc'e summed up my thoughts pretty well.  Much enjoyed.....jo
James_A_Fraser
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Thank you, friends.... I have to say this poem's a celebration of sorts. The Plumeria I planted this spring is 18" tall and has maybe ten leaves -- and three little blossoms. The scent of that flower just carries me off to Maui, so I wrote about it as romance.



~~J

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9 posted 07-19-2004 03:44 PM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for suthern

The breeze isn't all that's warm!!! *S*

Soft, sweet, sensual... your poem reflects the subject superbly! *S*

Beautiful work, my friend! *S*
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10 posted 11-20-2004 04:58 AM       View Profile for Marsha   Email Marsha   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marsha's Home Page   View IP for Marsha

Jamie darling man, OH what can I say but WOW, this is softly sensuous and definitely a subtext here, I love it. Why is it you are such a great writer, and manage to evoke such feelings of warmth with a few well chosen and delicious words, when others miss the area completely? I guess its because you are a superb writer, and craft your poems with delicate finesse, and others donít.

Love this utterly, utterly, it is really one superb piece from you. I so love a poem that has style and substance, and yours always do. Great to see your writing darling one, it always impresses me.  

Love and warm stuff
as always
Mushy


Tomorrow is another day I don't know what it holds
but I can face the future with courage brave and bold

Footprints In My Heart
Kethry

 
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