the space between my heart and yours.

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exhale
Senior Member

since 2003-06-13

Posts 646
Alberta,Canada

0 posted 2004-07-15 11:45 PM

the wind blows away the intoxicating aroma of you
as you walk away from me
the space between my feet and yours
increases with every footstep
the space between my heart and yours
increases with every tear rolling down my face

you told me you loved me
but i know better
i know better
the words leave your mouth so easily
flowing
don't the lies hurt you?

did you stop to think,
i might love you
i might love you with every fiber of my being
i only want to hold you
and be with you through the night
till tomorrow shows itself
and the rays of light peek between the curtains
but thats not good enough for you...

the space between my heart and yours
increases with every tear rolling down my face

Midnitesun

Member Empyrean

since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

1 posted 2004-07-16 12:00 PM

with this write,
that space actually shrinks

iliana
Member Patricius

since 2003-12-05

Posts 13434
USA

2 posted 2004-07-16 02:07 AM

Exhale, it is hard.....and it aches.....but for each further step you take......it gets better over time.......if he's a lier.......you've better rhymes.

....jo

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

3 posted 2004-07-16 12:30 PM

understanding this

Susan
Member Ascendant

since 2004-03-27

Posts 5104
walking the surreal

4 posted 2004-07-16 11:47 PM

Tears here. Heart ache. From me, deep understanding.

Susan

Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you. Joy is a state of mind.

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

5 posted 2004-07-17 12:43 PM

Fabulous writing...James

whiskey

Senior Member

since 1999-12-28

Posts 1278
Australia

6 posted 2004-07-17 07:53 PM

Gave my goosebumps I have felt this exact feeling before as most of us have. With time the pain fades and is replaced with joy of a new love.

"Dont cry because its over, smile because it happened. "

Ceinwyn
Member Elite

since 2000-07-09

Posts 2175
VA

7 posted 2004-07-17 07:56 PM

deja vu...this one definately does ache...*hugs*

If at first you don't succeed destroy all the evidence that you tried.

Susan Caldwell
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-12-27

Posts 8348
Florida

8 posted 2004-07-17 08:17 PM

"the wind blows away the intoxicating aroma of you
as you walk away from me
the space between my feet and yours
increases with every footstep
the space between my heart and yours
increases with every tear rolling down my face"

This was an "oh my god" stanza.

Well done.

"cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind"
~Sarah McLachlan~

suthern

Member Seraphic

since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

9 posted 2004-07-19 03:38 PM

the space between my heart and yours
increases with every tear rolling down my face

How well you've written this heartbreak! *S*

Nightshade

Member Patricius

since 2001-08-31

Posts 13962
just out of reach

10 posted 2004-07-19 04:19 PM

I must agree with Susan on the "oh, my god" stanza. Wonderful writing. Chris

Life itself is the most wonderful fairy tale.
Hans Christian Anderson

vandana

Member Patricius

since 1999-10-22

Posts 10463
USA

11 posted 2004-07-19 05:29 PM

nice read

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