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LeeJ
Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296


0 posted 2004-07-14 09:08 AM


One sliver of spontaneous
Knocks the whole landscape
To flowering…
Blues…grays sink away

I’m lucky
To discover, this spot
Core of lake
Heart of light
Devoted zealous

Stretches on forever to flying flags
Trumpeting in the wind
Liquid fire ringing evening sky

It is the color of great strides
Botox tendering age
Endowing
Tune
Carpenter’s smile
Fragrance tugging on my gown
Dreaming meditation

How fair the complexion of warm wind
Dropping a smile
Everlasting, if...
We knock on its door

Like a gliding boat
Returning to destiny
Forgetting about any wink of time
Undergoing…places which linger
Like a home
redecorated
restructured
With thoughts of illusions
Transformed into infinity
like a gliding boat
sailing
smooth
clear
azure
waters of something spiritual

© Copyright 2004 Lee J. - All Rights Reserved
Kethry
Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082
Victoria Australia
1 posted 2004-07-14 09:31 AM


This has such lovely, peaceful, tranquil images. I particularly like the carpenter's smile phrase.

Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind.  Unknown



iliana
Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434
USA
2 posted 2004-07-14 01:22 PM


A vision of beauty, LeeJ.  I feel like I just visited there, as well!   ....jo
BluesSerenade
Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549
By the Seaside
3 posted 2004-07-15 01:24 AM


It is the color of great strides
Botox tendering age
Endowing
Tune
Carpenter’s smile
Fragrance tugging on my gown
Dreaming meditation

How fair the complexion of warm wind
Dropping a smile
Everlasting, if...
We knock on its door

Loved the feel of your poem LeeJ, and how your words encompass and surround the daylight there.

So pretty~

miscellanea
Member Elite
since 2004-06-24
Posts 4060
OH
4 posted 2004-07-15 01:50 AM


"Liquid fire ringing evening sky"
  
   LeeJ., the imagery in this line is phenomenal!  Yet the poem keeps getting better and better throughout!  The feel of this is one of promise.  One of your best!
               misc'e


JL
Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128
Texas, USA
5 posted 2004-07-15 11:54 AM


Beautiful portrait, and poetry Lee J.

JL



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