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0 posted 2004-07-13 11:56 PM


Emergency Response


Heavy wheels and brakes crowd the neighborhood,
swoop like wraiths from all directions and --

they’re taking Sophie away

Two cars of cops and three firemen
with a significant plastic case
dance anxious at the entry gate
trying to get past
while the ambulance noses in
looking for a way around red fenders
and the blue cop lights

They’re looking worried now, trying windows,
motioning back to the fire truck
to bring something

Lady cop in fatigues calls through
the window crack, her hand finds its way
to her forehead, straightens pulled back hair
as she trots to the gate, waves hello
as Sophie in her ever present curlers
opens the door with a quizzical smile

Fireman at the side gate turns with a grin
and suddenly the ambulance boys and cops
break into a game of kick-the-can
right there in the driveway

[This message has been edited by Ratleader (07-14-2004 12:03 AM).]

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1 posted 2004-07-14 12:03 PM


Wheew!  What a build up!  I was worried about Sophie, and about you.  I hope the ending is really how it was!
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2 posted 2004-07-14 12:04 PM


Yes -- a graphic description of exactly what they did....the relief on those guys' faces was a thing of beauty!

It happened about half an hour ago.

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3 posted 2004-07-14 12:22 PM


Love this.  I was right there with you!  And I love happy endings.  Thanks for the fun and for sharing.

  Susan

Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you.  Joy is a state of mind.

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4 posted 2004-07-14 01:27 PM


From gripped with fear to grins... this has it all. *S* And my sigh of relief is joined by one of appreciation... excellent write! *S*
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5 posted 2004-07-14 02:59 PM


whewww, wonderful story with a positive end, which isn't always the case...well done Ed, thanks for the uplift...men who work this occupation, in my book, do not get paid enough.  

Thank you for sharing.

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6 posted 2004-07-14 03:14 PM


I'm happy too.

Nan (Pilgrim variety)

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7 posted 2004-07-14 05:00 PM


Well done, Sir...
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8 posted 2004-07-15 12:46 PM


Goodness, I'm glad Sophie was okay!!!
I hated to go on reading, but couldn't help myself.
I sighed a sigh of relief at the end, that she was okay!!
Good writing, Ed.
Hugs,
Ethel

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9 posted 2004-07-15 02:03 AM


Ed,
  I can never predict what surprises I'll find hidden in your poetry!  It's always a pleasure to read and explore.
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