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RobertB
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0 posted 2004-07-13 07:21 PM


it's 2:00 am when:

Thoughts puddle in the corner
of the cerebral cortex as
nocturnal ramblings take me to
syllabollic depths in word pool dreams
hammocked between slumbering
bliss and severe truth of consciousness
a netherworld swimming
of creativity brief as lightning
bright as the sun.

Robert


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Sunshine
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1 posted 2004-07-13 07:28 PM


I like,
so very much...
when "over the head" words
can be encompassed
within a poem...
and make so much sense...

intelligence meeting art...

Bravo!

Martie
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2 posted 2004-07-13 07:38 PM


Robert

This happens to me all the time in the  night, and is gone in the morning....sigh!

Snow
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desert flower looking for rain
3 posted 2004-07-13 07:40 PM


oh wow.... i so understand this one and i think you said it perfectly (but then... i am a fan)  ~S

"yet each man kills the thing he loves
by each let this be heard,
some do it with a bitter look,
some with a flattering word"
oscar wilde

Susan
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walking the surreal
4 posted 2004-07-13 08:20 PM


Yes, I understand this.  Sometimes I would rather that bliss be mine.

  Susan

Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you.  Joy is a state of mind.

Enchantress
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5 posted 2004-07-13 08:29 PM


Beautiful Robert...perfectly penned.
Hugs~

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
Dancing with you in the summer rain ~

Earth Angel
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6 posted 2004-07-13 09:14 PM


Yes! Exactly! I do so know what you mean! Terrific write!

Big warm hug,
EA

iliana
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7 posted 2004-07-13 09:31 PM


"Thoughts puddle in the corner
of the cerebral cortex as
nocturnal ramblings take me to
syllabollic depths in word pool dreams
hammocked between slumbering
bliss and severe truth of consciousness
a netherworld swimming
of creativity brief as lightning
bright as the sun"

RobertB, for me it's more like 3:30 a.m., but you've got it down exactly and so masterfully penned!   ....jo

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