So with out to-do (My response to Snow's - Until Thighs!) 8-)

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Open Poetry #33

So with out to-do (My response to Snow's - Until Thighs!) 8-)

EvocativeVerse2
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since 2003-09-10

Posts 1279

0 posted 2004-07-12 08:06 PM

So with out to-do

Sometimes my voice don't lend itself to prose,
And there are spans when thought's incomplete,
For I'm but a victim of loves dark throes,
And a fool I'll stay since I'll not retreat.

From verse I seek the perfect, "I love you,"
But language I affirm has no such phrase,
'Tis but rhetoric we give diction to,
Hopeless amenities built from cliché.

Shakespeare would say thou art a summer's day,
Yet even his words methinks don't suffice,
Alas this impasse brings naught but dismay,
And there is none that can give me advice.

So with out to-do I confess my love,
And the unspoken…it’s suggestive of.

Remember, if you're not part of the future, you're history!

Enchantress
Member Empyrean

since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

1 posted 2004-07-12 09:22 PM

Very lovely response Kevin...
I do believe it belongs up top beside Snow.

Hugs~

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
Dancing with you in the summer rain ~

froggy
Senior Member

since 2003-06-23

Posts 1893
Michigan

2 posted 2004-07-13 11:43 AM

Ahhhh Shakespeare
only you have that magical spell
to cast upon this froggy.
Love it Kevin.

:-)

Ribbits and Ribbits
from me to you

Snow

Senior Member

since 2000-10-16

Posts 1170
desert flower looking for rain

3 posted 2004-07-13 07:48 PM

what to say .. what to say...

well...

From verse I seek the perfect, "I love you,"
But language I affirm has no such phrase,
'Tis but rhetoric we give diction to,
Hopeless amenities built from cliché.

that is just perfect... before i could say.. "there is no such thing as perfect...." you answered it. i just love this!! and...

And the unspoken…it’s suggestive of.

well that's getting a very quiet.. "hell yeah" because it feels like a caress .. nicely done!! you make me smile. .......... love to you, me

"yet each man kills the thing he loves
by each let this be heard,
some do it with a bitter look,
some with a flattering word"
oscar wilde

iliana
Member Patricius

since 2003-12-05

Posts 13434
USA

4 posted 2004-07-13 09:39 PM

Kevin....what a dance this has been to watch -- this was a great response!

Snow

Senior Member

since 2000-10-16

Posts 1170
desert flower looking for rain

5 posted 2004-07-20 08:42 PM

sorry.. not ready to see this keep slipping away.

"yet each man kills the thing he loves
by each let this be heard,
some do it with a bitter look,
some with a flattering word"
oscar wilde

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