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Midnitesun
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0 posted 2004-07-12 04:31 PM



The door of the barn faces Mt Hood,
not so far from where you once stood
for something.

Where are your feet planted
today?
The harvested hay fields are a mirage.
Shimmering heat waves cast scintillating spells
upon all that dwells
near the edge of timelessness.

Caught in the grip of the mid-day sun,
I dream of running across cool pasture grasses,
with you by my side, in matching stride.

Where did our sunset go?


© Copyright 2004 Kathleen Kacy Stafford - All Rights Reserved
Duncan
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1 posted 2004-07-12 05:03 PM


"The harvested hay fields are a mirage."

No argument here...  

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2 posted 2004-07-12 05:47 PM


"not so far from where you once stood
for something."

Yes..understand and enjoy this Kacy.
Well done.
Hugs~

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
Dancing with you in the summer rain ~

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3 posted 2004-07-13 03:07 AM


Duncan, seen any good mirages lately?

Nancy, thanks friend, for understanding.

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4 posted 2004-07-13 11:53 AM


The harvested hay fields are a mirage.
Shimmering heat waves cast scintillating spells
upon all that dwells
near the edge of timelessness.

==============================

ya know what you asked me on my poem over in Sanctuary... well, now Im asking you the same thing...

why cant I write like this.....

awesome writing Kacy-girl... imagery and intend of express.

*keeping it*

I would love to live as a river flows, carried by the surprise of its own unfolding.

~Fluent~
John O'Donohue

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5 posted 2004-07-13 12:37 PM


melancholic...a little

but made me smile

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6 posted 2004-07-13 03:51 PM


Beautiful.

Eric

Janet Marie
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7 posted 2004-07-16 12:12 PM


moth reruns
bttt

Midnitesun
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8 posted 2004-07-16 12:17 PM


reruns? LOL
I was sorry I didn't have the digital camera with me yesterday, JM, I saw the most gigantic beautiful moth on the barn door! The body was nearly the size of my thumb, and the wingspan the width of my palm!
I thought of you, and smiled.

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9 posted 2004-07-16 02:02 AM


Really fine writing, lady!  *sigh* ....jo
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10 posted 2004-07-16 07:12 AM


Where are your feet planted
today?


Personally, I believe he's a much better person for knowing you...

Hugs and smiles sent your way

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11 posted 2004-07-16 09:04 AM


not so far from where you once stood
for something.

very cool line ...oh Kacy...darn girl....I understand this one so deeply....and send hugs your way...

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12 posted 2004-07-16 09:23 AM


Very good my friend... very good indeed...

I believe my favorite from you so far...


kayjay
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13 posted 2004-07-16 09:44 AM


You capture this scene so well! Lost loves and promises somehow never quite fade completely.  Well done!  Ken
PS I don't know if you are a Barbara Kingsolver fan, but her "Prodigal Summer" has a moth entomologist as a woman character.  It is a rich, rich novel with beautiful writing and characters.  Should you choose it, try to get the audio version from the library.  Barbara reads it with a wonderful back to the earth Eastern Kentucky accent.  From your writings, I think you'd like it.  

Through rubble and trouble and dark of night
The yawn of a dawn will hasten the light

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14 posted 2004-07-16 09:51 AM


Thanks to each of you, my friends, for your visit.
Ken, thank you, I haven't read her works yet, but you are the second person who has suggested I read that particular author, the first to mention an audio. Guess it's time to hit the library or Powell's bookstore again. Thanks for taking time to read and reply, I really appreciate your input.

[This message has been edited by Midnitesun (07-18-2004 01:41 AM).]

kayjay
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15 posted 2004-07-16 10:04 AM


Mt Hood and Powell's books are landmarks to me too.  Multnomah county carries her audios, printed version too I suppose. Barbara is one who writes like I wish I could.

Through rubble and trouble and dark of night
The yawn of a dawn will hasten the light

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16 posted 2004-07-16 12:29 PM


Kacy~

'the edge of timelessness'

Ahhhhhh~
I greatly enjoyed this read dear lady~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost,
the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
- Sufi epigram <))><

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