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Outcome: Redeemed
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Outcome: Redeemed |
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MARK V SHELDON Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 3015In a corporeal internship... |
Outcome: Redeemed Copyright 2004 by: Mark V Sheldon Your old age ultimately trapped you forcing you to see reality for what it is a busy and apathetic environment just past the bars before your tired eyes Even the hands that grab at your cage through force of routine show no concern for what life is remaining inside Your journey, however short, is not yet over Whisked away as mysteriously as you arrived you find yourself with your peers abandoned and forgotten What eyes observe you see only a pattern Some have even stopped watching The air of inevitability smacks stronger than the stench of surrender Most are coiled now into themselves their final refuge Only the newcomers expend their energy trying to entice notice from the visitors Transformed into a sheet of paper whose ink dictates your future with dates and numbers With labored breath you await the facts that will fill in the blank outcome… You CAN make a difference, but first you should learn how: http://educate-yourself.org/intro.shtml |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
 This makes me think of the "humane society" if it can be called that. Poor babies.Susan Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you. Joy is a state of mind. |
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MARK V SHELDON Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 3015In a corporeal internship... |
Very astute... I couldn't let my impressions go unexpressed after having seen and felt the circumstances. -MVS You CAN make a difference, but first you should learn how: http://educate-yourself.org/intro.shtml |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Buy a pet from the pound and save a life. This was a gut-wrenching read ~ but very well written!  EA |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
MARK, An interesting write, enjoyed the read. |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
The air of inevitability smacks stronger than the stench of surrender How true, how very true. Excellent write Mark...could also apply to our aged in their beds, awaiting the final moment of their lives. |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Magnus said what I was thinking as I read this.  as always, you have a keen eye on the social order, of man and beast. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Excellent write Mark... Right on target....gawd this aches. Heart hugs ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Hey Mark, another outstanding dissertation from you. Glad I stopped by. Were you referring to man or beast here? I suppose it applies to both. Sandra |
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MARK V SHELDON Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 3015In a corporeal internship... |
Hi Linda... I wholly recommend the same notion -- pound pets make incredible grateful companions. Thanks for stopping by, and I hope your health is back on track now.  Seymour: I would hope to have it no other way. Thank you for your purusal. Thank you, Barry. I hadn't thought of it through that perspective, but it totally works! (That's half the fun of reading the impressions of others -- discovering another angle that can apply). Hey Kacy: A keen eye? Perhaps... but sometimes it comes with a heart and stomach ache equally acute... As for that "social order"...  Nancy, only a fraction of having been there... Thank you for your always welcome hugs.  A good day to you, Sandra. Dissertation? This wouldn't even qualify for a foreward in terms of how much there is left to say or express, but I appreciate the compliment. Man or beast? How about: "the bestial mindset of man imposed upon the celestial vulnerability of beast"? Bottom line: I was at the pound a few days ago and saw this tragically sad, scruffy, old-timer mutt in a trap cage scarcely bigger than his small frame solemnly lying and descrying the busy front office with a look of his life being out of his "paws", if you will... He was then shortly whisked away in his cage by a worker who didn't think twice about the dog or the dog's probable future. That deeply affected me, and when I walked down the kennel row of lost, abandoned, and cast away dogs, my heart and soul ached at the thought of all these lives brought to their potential final end under such circumstances. I knew that I would have to write a poem after those experiences, and when I saw a form with the words at the end of the paper that read "Outcome: Redeemed", that became the obvious title for this piece. But I can (and did) see how this could equally apply to a human inmate... So, either way, I think you got the message. Hey: since I'm on a roll here: there's a poem that I wrote a few days ago that sank to the bottom of our blue pages here quicker than the Titanic... It was called "To Bid Time Return". If you're interested, I think both you and Enchantress may enjoy it because the clue is in the title, and I know you two especially enjoyed the movie SOMEWHERE IN TIME... Thanks, as always for the thoughts.-MVS You CAN make a difference, but first you should learn how: http://educate-yourself.org/intro.shtml |
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