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Foxyoasis
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since 2003-06-10
Posts 974
Atlantic Beach,Fla

0 posted 2004-07-10 03:57 PM



The magic behind your eyes is crimson red as I see you the person I knew is no longer there. I
look at you and it's just a blank stare.
So many things going on in your mind.
So little time for be to figure out.

I just know this your not
who you used to be.
Mountains tower over your
emotions oceans as deep as the cayon's
my feelings for you just grows.


very rough just typed it up anyhow what do u think

Fool me once shame on you.....Fool me twice shame on me.....


© Copyright 2004 Julie O'Neill - All Rights Reserved
RobertB
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since 1999-09-26
Posts 1104
Champaign, IL
1 posted 2004-07-10 04:25 PM


Hi...

Like you said, it is rough, but there is a good idea here.

I write rough poems and then sit and look at them until I can make them smooth.

At least they feel smooth to me.

:-}

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA
2 posted 2004-07-10 10:18 PM


Enjoyed...James
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