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Martie
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0 posted 2004-07-09 11:05 PM



Unchained

I am floating air ribald comfort blood aware
a song in tune of effortless
my fingers graceful glee no less

All stress is floating balloons in flight
and to dream it like I remember
is what I’ll do tonight   the flying like a dance
and I a ballerina rare in curve and line
I’m there already gone across the dusk that leaves
me sitting here in my unchained chair    relieved

© Copyright 2004 Martie Odell Ingebretsen - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2004-07-09 11:07 PM


Care to share the next dance,  seeing as how
you have just fluttered and flitted about
for a little while....

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2 posted 2004-07-09 11:31 PM


Wow Martie.. just fabulous and the imagery..marvelous!

hugs m'dear friend.

Maree

The clouds never expect it when it rains, but the sea, changes colour, but the sea, does not change.
~Stevie Nicks~

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3 posted 2004-07-10 12:28 PM


An uplift to my evening, Martie!
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4 posted 2004-07-10 01:37 AM


to fly . . .
even if not away
quietly
in the ease of air

e

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5 posted 2004-07-10 05:24 AM


I much enjoyed this!

"A spring shower was cause to run
Until you twirled me in the rain" ~ BDC

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6 posted 2004-07-10 07:52 AM


It seems that you are envisioning things that no longer are.  This is a wonderful find on an early morning.  KJ

Through rubble and trouble and dark of night
The yawn of a dawn will hasten the light

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7 posted 2004-07-10 07:54 AM


Martie
The write and you are a delight.

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8 posted 2004-07-10 08:10 AM


All stress is floating balloons in flight
and to dream it like I remember
is what I’ll do tonight  

~*~

You know how...
but you're good enough to show the rest of us
why...

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9 posted 2004-07-10 09:22 AM


I am floating air ribald comfort blood aware
a song in tune of effortless
my fingers graceful glee no less
==================================


oh you aint neva lied.

I would love to live as a river flows, carried by the surprise of its own unfolding.

~Fluent~
John O'Donohue

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10 posted 2004-07-10 09:54 AM


You put joy in my heart this morning.

Thank you.

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11 posted 2004-07-10 09:57 AM


Love the way you handle this....you floating in the poem's direction, with bits and parts of you escaping to dance little fancys of their own for a moment before they return to you....beautiful stuff.

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12 posted 2004-07-10 11:02 AM


MartieSis~

Quietly admiring the word-art of you~

'All stress is floating balloons in flight
and to dream it like I remember
is what I’ll do tonight'


Oh ... yes~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost,
the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
- Sufi epigram <))><

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13 posted 2004-07-11 12:09 PM


Martie, I love the peaceful and serene feel of this.
Just beautiful, sweet lady.
Hugs,
Ethel

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14 posted 2004-07-11 01:01 PM


"All stress is floating balloons in flight"

~ I often imagine this myself! Up and up and away my stresses go! ~ into the ethers to let the Universe deal with them! lol

May you always be unchained and unencumbered by the stresses in life!


Linda

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15 posted 2004-07-17 11:01 AM


Martie - I just never tire of reading your poetry and treveling with your words to places of wonder.  You say things so very well - Paul
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16 posted 2004-08-05 01:50 PM


Martie,
  I just had to bring this back up again.  It's so pretty, filled with hope.  A treat to read!
                      miscellanea

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17 posted 2004-08-05 05:22 PM


It sounds as though some great burden has been lifted, Martie!

This has a wonderful sense of peace about it.


Corinne

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18 posted 2004-08-05 07:08 PM


"I’m there already gone across the dusk that leaves
me sitting here in my unchained chair    relieved"


The degree between being unchained and being free is often wider than we wish.  Enjoyed much Martie...     

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19 posted 2004-08-05 10:32 PM


Waiter, could you bring me some of what she's having?  

Memory IS a renewable energy..

again!

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21 posted 2004-08-07 04:29 PM


And to think I nearly missed this.  Fly high Martie - life's beautiful when we leave the stress behind.
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22 posted 2004-08-07 05:52 PM


ahhh to feel this way....lovely Martie!

I've tried so hard to tell myself that you're gone though you're still with me
I've been alone all along..Now I'm bound by the life you left behind

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23 posted 2004-08-07 06:17 PM


Now I know why you like flowers so much! It is because you are a butterfly!

Flowers
Linda

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24 posted 2004-08-07 06:23 PM


Ethereal and yet so real in its feel of freedom.
Very beautiful.
Love, Margherita

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25 posted 2004-08-09 07:28 AM


this was tremendous Martie


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26 posted 2004-08-09 09:50 AM


Ah...to be unchained
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27 posted 2004-08-09 09:54 AM


and to dream it like I remember...

a wonderful line of thought

~smiling~
M

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