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Magnus
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0 posted 2004-07-09 10:39 PM


Whisper to me thy love in satin pure
as lilies lie upon the dimpled pond.
While willows wait the breath of your allure
and faeries fly and seek a virgin frond.

For in the glen where softest grasses grow
and leaves of clover paint the meadow green,
I stand and wait your lips as passions flow
into the night of bluest moon’s soft sheen.

And whence the time does come to slip away
my hand from yours as gentle shadows fall
A wish I leave of love left here to stay
as once again I climb, transgress the wall.

For battles waged lead thee to wait alone
upon the ramparts high above the sea.
And promises I leave as thee art shown
this love shall never ebb of me for thee.

Till oceans bring to thee the whitest foam
and rivers run the crest into the sea.
My heart shall beat for thee, not roam
and wait to love again...again you’ll see.

© Copyright 2004 Barry J. Tackett - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2004-07-09 10:44 PM


Ah, be still my beating heart!
This is lovely my friend Magnus...just lovely. Big hugs, Chris

   Life itself is the most wonderful fairy tale.
                                          Hans Christian Anderson

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2 posted 2004-07-09 10:49 PM


Barry

"For battles waged lead thee to wait alone
upon the ramparts high above the sea.
And promises I leave as thee art shown
this love shall never ebb of me for thee."

I can see this like some art...on a wall that is held in high esteem in some long ago...because it's so special a sentiment.  

iliana
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3 posted 2004-07-09 11:36 PM


Barry, I am awestruck with this one.  Beautiful.... and when I read it outloud, it just sings.   ....jo
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4 posted 2004-07-10 12:23 PM


Barry,

Chris stole the words right out of my mouth, as I read I thought "be still my beating heart".  Such sweet beauty and tenderness.  Mmmmmm, delicious.

  Susan

Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you.  Joy is a state of mind.

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5 posted 2004-07-10 01:21 AM


Whisper to you? I belief she would be hard pressed to utter even a sound. I doubt that  she could scarcely breathe after an outpouring of ardor such as this! Whisper? I think not. Gasp or moan ~ more likely...
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6 posted 2004-07-10 03:47 AM



A beautifully penned 'promise', Magnus, my style of writing.

Much enjoyed. And...now I know what a 'frond' is...

CG

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7 posted 2004-07-10 09:36 AM


Till oceans bring to thee the whitest foam
and rivers run the crest into the sea.
My heart shall beat for thee, not roam
and wait to love again...again you’ll see.

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Beautiful romantic rhymes poet sir...
its good to know this classic style of poetry is still held in respect.
Lovely poetic declarations Barry.

I would love to live as a river flows, carried by the surprise of its own unfolding.

~Fluent~
John O'Donohue

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8 posted 2004-07-10 01:29 PM


Magnus~
Should this beauty have floated upon my shore-of-wait ... I would have felt the coursing of the love it brings~

BEAUTIFUL !!!!
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost,
the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
- Sufi epigram <))><

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9 posted 2004-07-10 01:54 PM


Beautiful!

Eric

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10 posted 2004-07-10 07:32 PM


Magnus darling man, My word your writing as no other is pure beauty, the clarity of your writing, the beautiful combination of words and the way you enable me to see the image of love. It’s almost as if I can see it burst before my eyes. This had me totally entranced, truly exquisite and perfect writing,

For battles waged lead thee to wait alone
upon the ramparts high above the sea.
And promises I leave as thee art shown
this love shall never ebb of me for thee.

Till oceans bring to thee the whitest foam
and rivers run the crest into the sea.
My heart shall beat for thee, not roam
and wait to love again...again you’ll see.

YOU, the writer of this utterly beautiful piece are as always incandescently wonderful, and yes I do speak truly.

Love and warm stuff
as always
Mushy



Tomorrow is another day I don't know what it holds
but I can face the future with courage brave and bold

Footprints In My Heart
Kethry

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11 posted 2004-07-10 09:59 PM


SIGHS   This is beautiful and flows like silk.

It's a keeper~

Melissa~

Intellectually I know that Canada is no better than any other country. Emotionally I KNOW that Canada is the best country in the world!

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12 posted 2004-07-11 12:07 PM


Barry, this is such a beautiful and romantic poem.
I love all your poems, but you know what a
hopeless romantic I am.
Hugs,
Ethel

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13 posted 2004-07-11 01:22 PM


Barry, this one is honestly for the annuls of classic literature.  You have captured a spirit from the past and proven that it remains infinite.  Very well done, Sir!

-MVS


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14 posted 2004-07-11 07:52 PM


Take me back-to the days of romantic yore..
Love this.
Sandra

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15 posted 2004-07-11 08:43 PM


Oh my Barry....come closer while I whisper.
Beautiful write....mega hugs.

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
Dancing with you in the summer rain ~

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16 posted 2004-07-12 09:45 AM


Hi Barry, this was enormasely filled with the heartbeat of love, and all those emotions which lead love, amazingly poignant and beautiful.

God bless you both, always


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17 posted 2004-07-12 06:04 PM


OMG! Barry, this is exquisite!
I shall keep this in my favorites file.

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