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the_loner_23
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since 2002-06-08
Posts 5479
Jacksonville, Florida, USA

0 posted 2004-07-08 11:36 PM


We can never be
For so long
I thought we could be
But I was wrong

Now everytime I hear
Someone mention your name
I think of the pain
I endured the night
I made you go away

But I see you have
Memories of me
And you can't forget
All the good times
We spent together

I keep on telling you
The past stays in the past
But you just can't forget
And I do feel your pain

But just let me slip

Let me slip away

Let me slip away

Move on with your life
Leave me be
I don't want to remember
You anymore

I want to forget
That you were ever in my life
And I am sure
You want to do the same

But the only way
We can do this
Is if
You just let me slip away

Let me slip away

Let me slip away

And disappear out of your life

Cold hands means a warm heart

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ThisDiamond
Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353
Michigan, USA
1 posted 2004-07-09 12:02 PM


Julie...
Your works have matured, hauntingly beautiful form here...
Excellent, even in it's sadness and sorrow.
TD

Susan
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since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104
walking the surreal
2 posted 2004-07-09 12:40 PM


I agree with TD, I too see your growth, something we all hope for.  Nicely penned.

  Susan

Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you.  Joy is a state of mind.

iliana
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since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434
USA
3 posted 2004-07-09 12:56 PM


I agree with the other two -- I can see growth in your poetry, too.   .....jo
Duncan
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since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455

4 posted 2004-07-09 12:59 PM


"But I see you have
Memories of me
And you can't forget
All the good times
We spent together"

Once he gets past the hurt, he'll be glad he has those memories of the two of you.  Very nice write Julie...  


Midnitesun
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Gaia
5 posted 2004-07-09 01:03 AM


Ah, a very well written poignant write, Julie.

JamesMichael
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Kapolei, Hawaii, USA
6 posted 2004-07-12 08:39 PM


Nice writing...I have found that at some point you have to say the harsh words....not harshly, but words that have to be said..."I don't want you back, or I don't want to be with you anymore, or I don't love you anymore."   James
vandana
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7 posted 2004-07-27 07:39 PM


enjoyed
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