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CastleGuard
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since 2003-04-30
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Alberta, Canada

0 posted 2004-07-07 12:59 PM


Love At First Sight

When the first time my eyes upon Her fell —
What tremors shook deep within my might
No reason would explain, no words could tell —
But the deep tremors of love at first sight.

She stood in the doorway — yet I saw naught
But Her smile; that beacon of light that shone
In the blackness of my night, and so wrought
Onto my soul the blaze of a new dawn.

Oh Lord, how could such unexpected hand
Drive the flaming spear of love so deep
Within my heart; to burn and sear its brand
Into that face of yearning, crimson keep...

Then She said “Yes” — and many years hence
Her “Hello” will greet through the doorway frame;
That spear of long ago had pierced the fence
And unsealed the gate for love's eternal flame.

What game does fickle Fate play with the hearts
Of men; when one does seek - he shall not find;  
But what Fate ordains in heavens charts
Will a Man and a Woman through ages bind.

CG

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LeeJ
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since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296

1 posted 2004-07-07 01:31 PM


The very last paragraph was a life of events which unfold into the unperfect perfection, which is of time's owned events.  Simply stunning read and write.  
Sunshine
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Listening to every heart
2 posted 2004-07-07 01:36 PM


Ah, well done, Sir...and if I might add...
it sounds very, personally...yours...

A Romantic Heart
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since 1999-09-03
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Forever In Your Heart
3 posted 2004-07-07 10:06 PM


Beautiful...as to be expected!

Love and Hugs
~ARH

"The best and most beautiful things in the world cannot be seen or even touched.They must be felt with the heart."~Helen Keller (1880-1968)


CastleGuard
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since 2003-04-30
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Alberta, Canada
4 posted 2004-07-08 07:01 PM



Thank you, everyone,

...and Lady Sunshine, you are correct, it is very personally....mine...

CG

Honeybee
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since 1999-12-26
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Ontario, CANADA
5 posted 2004-07-09 09:28 PM


My God this is gorgeous...the meter and sentiment are perfect.

This is a keeper

Melissa~

Intellectually I know that Canada is no better than any other country. Emotionally I KNOW that Canada is the best country in the world!

Susan
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since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104
walking the surreal
6 posted 2004-07-09 10:16 PM


I liked this very much.

  Susan

Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you.  Joy is a state of mind.

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