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Open Poetry #33

fill up empty spaces

Sudhir Iyer
Member Ascendant

since 2000-04-26

Posts 6943
Mumbai, India : now in Belgium

0 posted 2004-07-07 11:13 AM

I sigh
under the burden of emotions
with raw and saline
undertones of a rare
sea-food
leafing through
shadows of dreams
that lay broken

I fall
like a little drop
thrown into the ocean
an unknown figure and
grossly un-understood
toggling flips sides
of a silver coin
with flops of lofty
cravings

I toss
my thoughts away
into an ever-intensifying
storm
yet, they keep coming back
impulsive like tunes
from a radiostation
that was once a favourite

they fill up empty spaces now

Gentle Spirit
Member Patricius

since 2000-10-09

Posts 13989

1 posted 2004-07-07 11:29 AM

I toss
my thoughts away
into an ever-intensifying
storm
yet, they keep coming back
impulsive like tunes
from a radiostation
that was once a favourite

they fill up empty spaces now

Incredible Sudhir.....oh those empty spaces that occupy our minds....
wonderful writing.

LeeJ
Member Patricius

since 2003-06-19

Posts 13296

2 posted 2004-07-07 11:33 AM

my oh my, what beauty, words which intensify the emotions...taking the reader by the hand into your world for a moment.

A pleasure to read you

Marge Tindal

Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

3 posted 2004-07-07 12:07 PM

MyFriend~
Your writing intesifies the emotions~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost,
the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
- Sufi epigram <))><

noles1@totcon.com

iliana
Member Patricius

since 2003-12-05

Posts 13434
USA

4 posted 2004-07-07 07:08 PM

An amazing poem, Sudhir, in every way.....jo

BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

5 posted 2004-07-07 08:10 PM

I toss
my thoughts away
into an ever-intensifying
storm
yet, they keep coming back
impulsive like tunes
from a radiostation
that was once a favourite

they fill up empty spaces now

Oh how bitter sweet it is!!

and isn't it the truth!!
Excellent poem, Sudhir~

Sudhir Iyer
Member Ascendant

since 2000-04-26

Posts 6943
Mumbai, India : now in Belgium

6 posted 2004-07-13 07:59 AM

Thank you all so very much, my dear friends...

You are all so kind and one of a kind

Regards
Sudhir

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