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Magnus
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0 posted 2004-07-06 09:07 PM


The stakes were high upon the felt
as cards around the dealer dealt.
His pair was high, as was his bet
the win was far from certain yet

A fine filly sat in his view
Brunette with eyes of misty blue
She smiled not once before the game
and now she’d called, her chips the same

The bet was even ‘round the board
before the flop was turned toward
He hit pure gold, three of a kind.
But those long legs haunted his mind.

He put a quarter mill on the green
Not even a flinch from her was seen.
She sat and thought behind those eyes
of misty blue and thund’ring skies.

A fourth card turned was a black Ace
Still not a twitch showed on her face.
The River came, a Ten of Spades.
Betting time’s now, no more charades.

He sat and pondered what she had
this filly so fine, lookin’ so bad.
She stared through his soul with those eyes
of misty blue and thund’ring skies.

His mind was whirling from the thought
that perhaps he was being bought.
For Misty Eyes sat with a cold stare
and twirled a lock of fine silken hair.

He went all in, the house was still
until she matched with a half mill.
Those legs, his mind, was all he saw
his feet were tired, his butt was raw.

He sat with no chips, waiting to see
the hand of fate of one filly.
She turned two spades,a King and Queen.
Royal this flush, the best he’d seen.

The finest hands and nails to match
raked in those chips, was quite a catch.
The filly had won, fair and square
More than a mill her winner’s share.

She stood to leave, he stood to stare
at long lean legs and silken hair.
She threw him a chip with a grin
they both won when he said “All in”.


© Copyright 2004 Barry J. Tackett - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2004-07-06 09:31 PM


Smiling here, you did a much better job of it than I did.

I was inspired by watching the Poker Tournament today, and it's such a fascinating game, and you did a great spin on it, Barry.

tsk. I'm gonna have to work on my game with a poet like you around!

Wonderful.

Susan
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2 posted 2004-07-06 09:32 PM


Smile.

  Susan

Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you.  Joy is a state of mind.

Paul Wilson
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3 posted 2004-07-07 10:10 AM


Barry...WOW..... I watch the poker tournaments on T.V. all the time and it felt like I was playing in the game while reading your poem.Enjoyed very much...Paul

My wise old Grandfather once told me
Never play cards with a woman for money
I guess he was right............

~~To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you~~
Paul

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4 posted 2004-07-07 10:11 AM


Outstanding Barry! Very well done, good to see ya again!
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5 posted 2004-07-07 12:17 PM


Magnus~
Oh my ... this is a spectacular penning~
Sending it to a friend who plays the Poker Tournament rounds~


*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost,
the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
- Sufi epigram <))><

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LeeJ
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6 posted 2004-07-07 12:31 PM


your story is a winner...very enjoyable read
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7 posted 2004-07-07 12:37 PM


okay...I think it's time for me to head to Biloxi

good write!

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8 posted 2004-07-07 04:46 PM


Want to take a gamble on this one?   /pip/Forum33/HTML/001513.html

Enjoyed, my friend...

Mr»ÄlleÿÇät
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9 posted 2004-07-07 06:08 PM


LOL
Yep we're a sucker for her silken hair

iliana
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10 posted 2004-07-07 07:04 PM


I'm laughing, too, in a nice way 'cause, Barry, I just loved the story and the fine writing!!
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11 posted 2004-07-08 07:11 PM


Loved your card game, Barry.
Hugs,
Ethel

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12 posted 2004-07-08 08:37 PM


Barry

I am not very poker savey...but sure did enjoy your poem!  

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