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kaile
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0 posted 2004-07-05 12:10 PM


silence ambushed them,
like a vulture upon
its hapless prey

they committed pretense
to binding the holes
in their relationship

he fed her bliss
in front of
everyone's adoring eyes

a lovey dovey picture
of unemoted loss

© Copyright 2004 heng kaile - All Rights Reserved
Seymour Tabin
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1 posted 2004-07-05 12:23 PM


kaile
Enjoyed the read.

kaile
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2 posted 2004-07-05 12:27 PM


thanks Seymour...
RobertB
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3 posted 2004-07-05 12:28 PM


what a way to put it!!!!
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4 posted 2004-07-05 12:29 PM


kinda sad

I look at people sometimes and I wonder if they are truly happy and what goes on behind closed doors...

being in my position at work, I often find out what goes on really, and it's sad

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5 posted 2004-07-05 12:29 PM


kaile!  how well your words have depicted this truth....it's kind of slithery, too...

keeping it...   ~K~

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6 posted 2004-07-05 01:03 PM


thanks RobertB for the exclamations

hi Dixie, i wonder too. guess this musing is a product of my curiosity. sorry that this has left you feeling melancholy

gosh, Kahlil, what an honour. i'm truly flattered

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7 posted 2004-07-05 03:01 PM


a tight clean write
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8 posted 2004-07-05 03:09 PM


I have been saddened by witnessing similar scenarios. i.e. the unexpected pronouncement of the "perfect couple" splitting up!

All that glitters is not necessarily golden.


Linda

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9 posted 2004-07-05 03:14 PM


Too often, true.  Makes me sick.  Great right, kaile!
Susan
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10 posted 2004-07-05 03:16 PM


Too true this, and so sad.  Well written.

  Susan

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11 posted 2004-07-05 03:39 PM


kaile - thought provoking words I read here. Great write...

BC

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12 posted 2004-07-09 12:52 PM


Hi K..

I'm rarely here anymore so I'm very glad to see this gem of minimalism.

Hugs, hope you're ok...

K

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13 posted 2004-08-09 04:38 PM


very nice work... very nice indeed!!!
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