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I Hate Cafe au lait

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JP
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since 05-25-99
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Loomis, CA


0 posted 06-09-2000 01:05 PM       View Profile for JP   Email JP   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit JP's Home Page   View IP for JP

My venture to the dark
is very well lit.
I stumble not of stones
of ire, pain, or death.

My path to the pit
is cleared of debris.
I boldly stroll forth
unafraid and unhindered.

My journey to this place
is unfettered by strife.
I wince at the pain
kindled by the light.

My travels to dark passion
thwarted by good thought.
The nocturnal refuge
subverted by day's glow.

My eternal quest of gloom
stalled by enlightened hand.
The bitter twist of black coffee
diluted with cool milk.


 Yesterday is ash, tomorrow is smoke; only today does the fire burn.
JP

© Copyright 2000 JP Burns - All Rights Reserved
X Angel
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since 11-07-1999
Posts 1592
Oregon


1 posted 06-09-2000 11:03 PM       View Profile for X Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for X Angel

I love this poem, but we have a huge problem here Houston!

<--owns an espresso bar!
HMMPH!
*pout* ya big bully!

kiddin kiddin

~Heather
Poet deVine
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2 posted 06-10-2000 09:44 AM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

Sure is nice to see you around. And don't tell Heather, I don't like coffee!! Au Lait or otherwise.  
nando
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Vaxjo, Smaland, Sweden


3 posted 06-10-2000 10:05 AM       View Profile for nando   Email nando   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for nando

Enjoyed reading this.
Love the choice of words, and the ending wrappes it up in a nice sort of filisofical way...

Good work

-nando-


 Ask me how to live your life, and this to you IŽll say: make your choises true and wise, so that when tomorrow will arise, youŽll smile at yesterday...
X Angel
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4 posted 06-10-2000 03:53 PM       View Profile for X Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for X Angel

I HAVE TEA!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!


~H
JP
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5 posted 06-10-2000 05:34 PM       View Profile for JP   Email JP   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit JP's Home Page   View IP for JP

Okay, I was waiting for some replies to see if my metaphor was too obtuse... I guess it is.  I know that mostly when I write about coffee, I am speaking of coffee, but in this case I was speaking of something else.  Anyone care to take a stab at it?

 Yesterday is ash, tomorrow is smoke; only today does the fire burn.
JP

"Everything is your own damn fault, if you are any good." E. Hemmingway

Menage Numero Trois
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since 07-20-99
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Zee South of France


6 posted 06-10-2000 10:12 PM       View Profile for Menage Numero Trois   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Menage Numero Trois

actually from the first JP I assumed this was about the dark forum not being *DARK* enough...hence black coffee diluted with cream! Am I correct?

H
JP
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7 posted 06-12-2000 11:03 AM       View Profile for JP   Email JP   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit JP's Home Page   View IP for JP

Give three gold stars to Menage!  

Rarely do I ask anyone if they understand my meaning behind one of my works - I've always felt that a poem has a plethora of meanings, dependent upon the reader.

Naturally a poet knows (usually) what s/he is writing about, and too often that poet can get personally offended when a reader imposes thier own meaning on the work... I try not to do that (although I do, sometimes, get taken aback when someone writes "I know just how you feel, I hope things will get better...".  It bothers me more because of the assumption that my poem is a reflection of my life's circumstances or my emotional state...) It is never a bother when someone tells me, "That poem spoke to me", or, "Somehow you put into words how I feel", or similar comments...

Oh hell, I'm rambling again... that happens to me once in a while.  

Suffice it to say that I was lamenting the "Up With People" aura existing in Dark Passions lately - a place I thought was designed for the darker side of poetic endeavor.  I suppose the moderators have set the tone they deem appropriate for their forum and I should learn to love it...

hmmmm... doesn't sound like me now does it?

 Yesterday is ash, tomorrow is smoke; only today does the fire burn.
JP

"Everything is your own damn fault, if you are any good."  E. Hemmingway



[This message has been edited by JP (edited 06-12-2000).]
gothicmoth
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8 posted 06-12-2000 03:17 PM       View Profile for gothicmoth   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for gothicmoth

Ditto.
Joel the wolf
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9 posted 06-13-2000 01:27 PM       View Profile for Joel the wolf   Email Joel the wolf   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Joel the wolf's Home Page   View IP for Joel the wolf

I understand what your saying, and I hope it gets better. hahaha
But really, yes the tone as of late has been ?? not in the darkly passionate corners of the soul.
I also wish more could be expressed along the lines of ?? a good dark rich espresso

Joel.

 I howl a mournful song, that echos within my chambered heart, for all to read? nay for all to feel.
 
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