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LeeAnne Dk
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since 2000-06-07
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0 posted 2000-06-09 09:28 AM


I walked pass my mirror today
I stared into it
Inside I saw a female
Whose description did not fit
Her eyes penetrated into mine
Sadness reflected in them
Her soul longing to reach out
Her heart wanting a friend
I felt myself and my heart jumped
In reality I wasn't happy
The ache was that the person
To discover it was me
I forced a smile
For the sake of pride
In my heart I prayed
That finally I would get what I wished for inside

         LeeAnne Dk
           9/6/2000


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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
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Twilight Zone
1 posted 2000-06-09 10:07 AM


be strong
let your feelings out but don't do anything stupid....try to be strong
i know its easier said than done

LeeAnne Dk
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since 2000-06-07
Posts 32

2 posted 2000-06-10 12:19 PM


Trust me..I will...
SpitFire
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since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396

3 posted 2000-06-11 09:56 PM


~I've looked in this very mirror.  Hang in there.  Great expression...written well. Take care. *Peace.
Joel the wolf
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since 2000-04-06
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Angels Camp
4 posted 2000-06-13 01:00 PM


I try to avoid mirrors, haha they seem to crack whenever I'm around.
Anyway it's the truth I avoid mirrors, but I have looked into the same mirror as this several times, I strive for what I want every day, and now I'm getting it.
have strength kid, from your response you seem to be able to.
Luck and love kid.

Joel.

 I howl a mournful song, that echos within my chambered heart, for all to read? nay for all to feel.

JP
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since 1999-05-25
Posts 1343
Loomis, CA
5 posted 2000-06-14 11:44 AM


Hang in their, it will get better.

I know exactly how you feel.

I've been their girlfriend!

Pish Posh!  Rubbish all... I do not know exactly how you feel, I have not been there, and I don't know you well enough to know if you are writing of yourself, or just writing.

I do know that I have felt similarly in my life, and that your writing depicted that state quite clearly and eloquently.

I like what you have done, it touches my heart and I enjoyed the read.  Please keep more coming for us to enjoy

And yes... for all those who have taken offense at this reply; I was being sarcastic (and snotty) for a reason, although I will leave it to you to understand.

 Yesterday is ash, tomorrow is smoke; only today does the fire burn.
JP

"Everything is your own damn fault, if you are any good." E. Hemmingway


SpitFire
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since 2000-04-19
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6 posted 2000-06-14 11:51 AM


~

[This message has been edited by SpitFire (edited 06-14-2000).]

LeeAnne Dk
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since 2000-06-07
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7 posted 2000-06-15 01:45 PM


Jp..Ermm I'm quite unsure about your reaction to my poem. Whatever it is you have to say, That was how I feel.
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