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Lost Forever |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
Now I know that you don't feel the same way Loosing you makes me feel I had died that same day I honestly don't know how I'm suppose to just move on Cause my heart and soul, I know is not that strong All the while I thought you'd always be by my side You decided to leave, this left me totally empty inside I've said that I'm here in this world just to be with you You left and took the only reason for me to continue How could someone like you just so easily break my heart You took my love for you and just as easily tore it apart Please tell me the reason why everything had to end like this I need you with me, I'm about ready to accept Death's kiss Though it hurts me so much, I guess you never really did care Cause now that I need you the most, you don't want to be there Swore on my grave, no matter what, I'll always be here for you For you are the love of my life and this is the least for you I could do Been thinking of different ways to always be together, forever with you Only one thing stands out, but I can't, for this is wrong for me to do I will always love you, a promise to you I'll always make I'll evetually be with you forever when my life HE finally takes |
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sweetthing61401 New Member
since 2000-06-07
Posts 8 |
this poem is really great. At the beginning I thought that the man had left the girl and broke her heart. Then at the end you realize he had died and left her alone in the world. It is great that the girl chose to live because even though the one she loves is gone there is still much to do in this world. He would want that person to live and be happy and meet him when it is her time. |
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Jeremiah Johnson Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 1223Brooksville, Fl, U.S |
this is a great poem. it goes through someone's life after a lost of a loved one. it sets itself up nice. could be unclear to some but is meaningful in your own heart. |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
I like the way you thought this one through..and taking your own life is not the answer! Good job.  |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
Some believe if you commit the big S you don't go to heaven, others are sure you do.. Is it worth the risk? We are young and can live on, it is the older or elderly that feel a passing much more so than we do....... I too have lost people young and old, but you grieve, scream, cry, rage at the fates and then you rebuild your life. There are many special gifts awaiting us all, kids, grandkids, wonderful relationships, if we end it we never even have a chance at life's happiness.. I know how it FEELS but with hope and love, and new things to try you do get on with it... If you wanna talk anytime please email me.. I'll tell you this...... No eternal reward will forgive us now for wasting the dawn..... ~Isis~ (Goddess - Sovereign of the Spirit) |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
i'd love to talk about it Isis thanks for offering you'll hear from me soon |
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Martini Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 308Toronto, Ontario, Canada |
been there actually I'm still there should you want to compare stories send an email my way I'm always here to listen |
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