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Bunny
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since 05-13-2000
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0 posted 06-05-2000 07:11 PM       View Profile for Bunny   Email Bunny   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Bunny

I thought this would make it better
I thought that ending myself would make me happy
I thought it could make them all see
How wrong they were to hurt me
Now I've done it,
Now it's all ending
My blood is all around me
It's getting hard to breathe
Then you came and saw me
You fell over me,
Scared and crying
You say you'll miss me
And then I realize
The mistake I have made
Letting life go means leaving you behind
You say it will be ok
But I can feel the pain
And I see the light fading
This is not what I was meant to be
The last words to escape my mouth are an ungranted plea
Please!  Help me!
© Copyright 2000 Bunny - All Rights Reserved
Lonelypoet
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since 05-10-2000
Posts 127
Conklin,NY,USA


1 posted 06-05-2000 07:29 PM       View Profile for Lonelypoet   Email Lonelypoet   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lonelypoet

This poem is excellent and it reminds me of two poems: The Blood of an Angel and ON the stony path you knelt. I hope to read more like this one.
Bunny
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2 posted 06-05-2000 08:41 PM       View Profile for Bunny   Email Bunny   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Bunny

To Lonley Poet-
I have never read the poems you named, because I am relitively new to the forums, but I will try and find them! Thank you for responding!
Jana Tovey
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since 05-30-2000
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3 posted 06-05-2000 10:20 PM       View Profile for Jana Tovey   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Jana Tovey

Glad to see suicide being represented as a mistake.  It is the ultimate waste, I feel.  Who knows what the person who commits suicide could have gone on to contribute.
Bunny
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4 posted 06-06-2000 07:45 AM       View Profile for Bunny   Email Bunny   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Bunny

Jana-
I am so sorry to say this to you, but when a person decides to end thier own life they cannot see what they might becaome, they can only see what they can't and wont become.  They are sick and can't see any way out except the end.  It's really quite sad and as fo getting help?  If the person is out of control enough to take away thier own life then what do you think the chances are of them thinking oh, I know, I can go get help from that lady! She will make it ok!  It's really very sad so if you are becoming worried about a loved one you shouldnt wait for them to get help, you be thier help or else you might be too late.
Joel the wolf
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since 04-06-2000
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5 posted 06-11-2000 03:53 AM       View Profile for Joel the wolf   Email Joel the wolf   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Joel the wolf's Home Page   View IP for Joel the wolf

I've had several friends do this,
to much for now I'll look it up later.
just to close to home.

Joel.

 I howl a mournful song, that echos within my chambered heart, for all to read? nay for all to feel.
fractal007
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6 posted 06-11-2000 04:02 AM       View Profile for fractal007   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for fractal007

This poem was truly a display of RAW POWER, as far as emotion is concerned.

This was an excellent exploration of current dilemmas going on in the lives of humans today.  All I can say is

Whoa!

This one hit me hard!

 We are the hollow men
We are the stuffed men
Leaning together
Headpiece filled with straw. Alas!
Our dried voices, when
We whisper together
Are quiet and meaningless
As wind in dry grass
Or rats' feet over broken glass
In our dry cellar

Shape without form, shade without color,
Paralyzed force, gesture without motion;

--T.S. Eliot
 
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