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When Will I Know It's Over ?
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When Will I Know It's Over ? |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores 
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When Will I Know It's Over ? ~*Marge Tindal*~ You said it was over. You walked away. Why doesn't it feel like it's over ? When will it ever feel that way ? I watch and I wait. You don't return. When will I know it's over ? When will the fire cease to burn ? It must have been easy for you. You couldn't have any regret. Why do I feel that I am left with a love that I love yet ? You must not have had the same feelings, as the ones I felt for you. When will I know it's over ? When will I feel as you do ? How does the Twelfth Of Never sound ? Seems reasonable to me. When will I know it's over ? Will be an eternity. ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
This is lovely Marge, yet so very sad. *hugs* Je t'aime plus qu'hier et moins que demain." I love you more than yesterday and less than tomorrow (unkown) |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
DarkAngel~ It is sad when someone leaves your life and you're not ready for them to go. It happens to so many ... and it's okay to hurt over it and to just keep them in a corner of your heart. Thank you for all your sweet replies to my posts. I appreciate you. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Lindsay Kaznowski Junior Member
since 2000-05-27
Posts 23 |
~Marge~ I love your poem...It made me think about the things that happen in live, the way people feel sometimes--Yet it was so sad, Great poem =") -Princess (Linds) |
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Poet deVine
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
I think this is a feeling most of us has experienced. When faced with this question we tend to hang on and on...but sometimes, it's best to let go...I really like this one Marge!!! |
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mario22 Junior Member
since 2000-05-28
Posts 23 |
Hey Marge, This is a very nice poem, it really made me think and remember all the relationships that were I guess just not to be, keep up the good work I look forward to your next one. |
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mario22 Junior Member
since 2000-05-28
Posts 23 |
Hey Marge, This is a very nice poem, keep up the good work, it really made me remember all those bad relationships that I thought would be the one but they wasnt. |
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mario22 Junior Member
since 2000-05-28
Posts 23 |
Marge, What a beautiful poem, I hope to get as good as you are with words, smile god has given you a talent that you deserve. Always Mario22 |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Lindsay~ Yes, it does have an air of sadness about it ... but then so does life sometimes. Life goes on ... but we can still remember. PoetdeVine~ Glad you enjoyed. Your reply reminds me of a poem I wrote entitled, 'Holding On To Letting Go' ... goodness only knows which archive it's in now ! Thanks gal. Mario~ Thank you for the reply. I personally believe that all relationships we encounter are 'meant to be' ... if only for the time we're in them. Look forward to reading more of your work. Welcome, again.  Goodness knows I've appreciated your comments. You might want to visit the other forums also and grab some great talented folks at work.~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
"How does the Twelfth Of Never sound ? Seems reasonable to me. When will I know it's over ? Will be an eternity." I love the nice sharp edge of the last stanza, I can just hear the sacrasm in the words "the Twelfth Of Never." a wonderful poem as always, Willow White Feather. < !signature--> ------------------------ "Isn't it enough to see that a garden is beautiful without having to believe that there are fairies at the bottom of it too? " Douglas Adams. "Here chewing your tail is joy" Richey Edwards "Take nothing but pictures. Leave nothing but footprints. Kill nothing but time". Baltimore Grotto "Do not listen to a word I say Just listen to what I can keep silent" Nicky Wire [This message has been edited by brian madden (edited 05-28-2000).] |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
Marge, it hurts when you can't understand when you can't find your feet to move on. Why do we draw these painful moments out and not accept the inevitable truth??? Wonderful work, but then, when do I ever expect any less from you...  I'll tell you this...... No eternal reward will forgive us now for wasting the dawn..... ~Isis~ (Goddess - Sovereign of the Spirit) |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
BrianM~ Isn't it interesting that you took 'The Twelfth Of Never' as sharp-edged sarcasm ?Actually nothing could be further from the truth, my friend. I was listening to Johnny Mathis and his rendition of the song is so beautiful, that I take 'The Twelfth Of Never' as being a forever kind of place. 'I'll love you 'til the poet runs out of rhyme, until 'The Twelfth Of Never' and that's a long - long time.' Now .... that's the way to remember ! Isis~ This wasn't a personal piece of my slice of life ... but I do believe that we do not have to let go ... we just need to move beyond. I look at relationships as being something we hold onto for the positives we get out of them ... and move on beyond any pain. Sometimes this poet takes poetic license in her feelings. But, because I write from the heart I hope my writing reaches other hearts who need the validation that it's okay to remember. Thanks for the reply, hon. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Joel the wolf Senior Member
since 2000-04-06
Posts 1333Angels Camp |
Well kid you have reached my heart with this one, I have felt like this with my X we had been together for 20 years, and even now when I see her old feelings come on strong. the twelfth of never, how true. I howl a mournful song, that echos within my chambered heart, for all to read? nay for all to feel. |
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traveling heart Junior Member
since 2000-05-27
Posts 26 |
Marge, First off, thanks for the welcome... such nice welcomes from so many... And in regard to your poem let me just say, you have said my exact feelings in response to one whom I recently loved, (yes, an internet relationship) and who had logged out of my life completely when things seemed so wonderful. I do not understand how one person can do this to another... perhaps we should compare notes... Luckily, bad feelings do ease, and another can step in, such as the wonderful person I wrote of in my first submission. And it gives me hope that all men are not so fickle... (sorry guys...) |
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Scarlet Lady Member
since 2000-02-11
Posts 242Midwest |
Great work here lady! It just flowed....and showed your heartfelt emotion. I love poetry that draws you in, and your poem drew me in! I felt like I was the one writing....a sign of a good poem. Thanks! |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Joel~ Sweetheart ... keep the memories as they will serve you well. When someone touches our lives .. they are worth remembering. I believe that loving relationships are etched on the heart in that forever kind of place. TravelingHeart~ Hon, I'm glad you found the poem interesting, but my philosophy is simply that people only 'do' to us what we allow them do. I choose to remember all love with fondest regards for the positive feelings they brought into my heart. As we move beyond the pain it's important to keep the good feelings to touch from time to time. Illusion~ Thank you so much for your kind comments. If I 'drew you in' then I've accomplished a feat that gives a poetess deep satisfaction. I really appreciate your reply. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~Marge,...you're a wise woman. You speak with such a strength and wisdom I appreciate you....you know that? hehe. Move beyond...that is good. What a great philosophy....holding onto the good memories to go back to them when needed. Like you said you think that all relationships are meant to be,..atleast for the time we're in them. We love and learn from each and every one. Goodness Marge,...thanks for posting this and having such wonderful advice in your replies. Thank you Mam. *Peace. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
SpitFire~ I do so enjoy your thoughtful comments. What a neat friend you are quickly becoming. (not just because you like my poetry ... but because I feel your wisdom and caring for others feelings.) It's a delight to see that in your replies you've taken the time to read the other responses ... me too ! Thanks for making my day. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Indeed Marge, we learn from every relationship that we're in. . . but sometimes, isn't it good to know that it's over? To hear the words? I mean, I know that we can't wait FOREVER for one person, but I feel that hearing the words makes it easier to move on. . . and I know that there's not always a WHY. . . but I guess (for myself) I would just like to know that there's a definite end. . . this happened to me with my first girlfriend. . . one day, it was just over. . . but the words weren't there. . . I needed to hear them, but she didn't feel the need to say them. . . Anyway, this is a great poem, made me think and touched my heart. . . ------------------------------------------------------------ That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Sven~ I suppose we all have different perspectives on relationships in our lives. I know when a relationship is 'over' ... but I don't have to let go of the wonderful things that made it special to start with. I guess I'm a optimist in that respect. I've loved many and been loved by many and have never felt the need to hear someone say, 'It's over'. Like I said ... different. Going on or 'beyond' for me is also knowing that I am who I am because of those who have loved me. I choose to take those memories with me. Thanks for reading and possibly seeing that a different light shines in my heart. Love ya', my friend. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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EagleOne Member Elite
since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829Between a laugh and a tear... |
This one really got to me Marge, a little too close to home i think. It's not always easy to move on though, and I think that some people need that finality, an ending to allow them to move on. Very true when you say that those who have loved us have helped shape who we are. So staying on those lines you would have to ask is it ever really over? Great work agian Marge, it has provoked some discussion too.. I see that as a good thing. < !signature-->God grant me the serenity to accept the people I cannot change, the courage to change the one I can, and the wisdom to know it's me. ~Unknown [This message has been edited by EagleOne (edited 05-30-2000).] |
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Alle'cram Senior Member
since 2000-02-28
Posts 1816Texas |
Marge, I love the Johnny Mathis song, as well as your lovely poetry. You are truly gifted. Marcy |
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ESP Member Elite
since 2000-01-25
Posts 2556Floating gently on a cloud.... |
More words of wisdom flowing forth from your soul.... This is a wonderful poem. I know exactly what you mean...moving beyond but hanging on to memory. Funny...I was thinking about it only this morning while I was walking to Piano lesson. You put it so beautifully.... Thank you for sharing this with me. I love ya Marge! Love and hugs, Lizzie  "Poetry is the true expression of my soul, it is my ultimate means of communication. It is my rainbow of delight." |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
I found Passionate Forums at a point in my own life when a friend pulled away quite unexpectedly, I wasn't prepared for it, I was quite devastated. I nearly gave up writing. I felt as if I had failed as a friend, yet didn't see the blessings received by my friend and looked instead to the "loss" This poem truly shook me, even if it wasn't written from personal experience and I'm glad it wasn't, many experience this and this poem gives comfort and reassurance that everything shared is worth something. thank you!!! Kathleen indy31_99@yahoo.com |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
EagleOne~ Hon, no one ever said it's easy ... it's just sometimes necessary for people to move 'beyond' their pain. I've just never thought of any relationship as being 'over' ... just changed. Might sound 'pollyanna-ish' to some ... but that's what my heart tells me is right. If someone in my life is worth remembering ... I want it to be with kind and loving thoughts that I remember them. Marcy~ Thank you, my friend. Lil' Lizzie~ Sweetie, remembering is a gift that loving people in our lives give to us. I choose to have mine remembered in a loving way. I'm glad that you have those thoughts too. Love ya' Kathleen~ I can tell you that I understand with compassion and caring. I'm pleased that this writing can give you comfort. I sincerely appreciate your thoughts. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
Oh my God, The Twelfth of Never.......... Dear God....well it's a beautiful sentiment...and a beautiful song. "When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass, and the sun drips honey." Laurie Lee |
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ESP Member Elite
since 2000-01-25
Posts 2556Floating gently on a cloud.... |
I know this is old and i have replied to it before way back but it just struck a chord with me tonight! remains a beautiful write. See ya around! Liz xx "Time has told me not to ask for more, one day our ocean will find its shore" ~Nick Drake |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
LovelyLizzie~ Thank you for reminiscing on this one dear girl~ Hoping that life is treating you soooooo kindly~  *Huglets*  ~*Marge*~ ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
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