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The Jackal
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since 1999-08-13
Posts 426
Springfield, Massachusetts U.S.A

0 posted 2000-05-26 10:42 PM


got your cell phone in your car
so very proud..everyone whos everyone
knows who you are
and your choking on ambition
and its choking on you..and to your ear
is a plastic hell..and your surreal
im so jealous of what you've become
the perfection impressive
but far too few
of ants drowning in reality
just like you..



 "you can have my isolation..you can have the hate that it brings
you can have my absence of faith..you can have my everything"

"so impressed with all you do..tried so hard to be like you..flew too high and burnt the wing..lost my faith in everything"

"I am too connected to you to
Slip away, to fade away.
Days away I still feel you
Touching me, changing me,
And considerately killing me."

The Jackal


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Isis
Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296
Sunny Queensland
1 posted 2000-05-27 12:22 PM


I don't know whether jealous is the right word???  Perhaps 'I pity what you have become?'
Choking on ambition that in itself is a punishment in my opinion.  Sure he may have the fancy car and house, but does he possess true happiness?   It all means nothing without the right person by your side and loving friends and family.  Sometimes the rich are poorer than we...
Great work  

 I'll tell you this...... No eternal reward will forgive us now for wasting the dawn.....
~Isis~
(Goddess - Sovereign of the Spirit)



brian madden
Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374
ireland
2 posted 2000-05-28 06:00 PM


I am proud of the fact that I don't have a cell phone. I agree parts of society have gone insane, reading American psycho will give you that point of view.

really liked the poem, some great images

and your choking on ambition
and its choking on you..and to your ear
is a plastic hell..and your surreal

but far too few
of ants drowning in reality



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"Isn't it enough to see that a garden is beautiful without having to believe that there are fairies at the bottom of it too? "
Douglas Adams.

"Here chewing your tail is joy"

Richey Edwards

"Take nothing but pictures. Leave nothing but footprints. Kill nothing but time".

Baltimore Grotto

"Do not listen to a word I say
Just listen to what I can keep silent"

Nicky Wire


SpitFire
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since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396

3 posted 2000-05-28 06:17 PM


~Wow,...ants drowning in reality just like you.  I have always referred to these people in this type of situation as ants and it's so really there and happenning...it's quite sad actually.  It's not happiness in any form, it's sugar water at it's best...they think that that's what they really want when in the end they are empty.  Empty of true love and enjoyment of life.  Great post. *Peace.
Joel the wolf
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since 2000-04-06
Posts 1333
Angels Camp
4 posted 2000-05-29 03:01 AM


I don't have a cell phone ether. You have hit the nail on the head with this one kid.

Great work.

 I howl a mournful song, that echos within my chambered heart, for all to read? nay for all to feel.

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