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Swåmp¤Faerÿie
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since 2000-03-29
Posts 358
Illinois

0 posted 2000-05-19 04:15 PM


I built my palace on white washed island's sand.
Violent foaming waves rush & swirl around it.
They come to close,crashing in on my castle,will it stand??¿
I pile up autumn leaves to keep off the waves that treaten to pound it.
Do i really expect to fight them off with that??¿
All the sad thoughts flooding in with passion,
just to knock me down FLAT.
I better build on black rocks next time,keep my house from crashin'.
It's a sad thing that i continue to do,
i make myself feel worse & worse from thinking so much.
I don't even WANT to feel better it's true.
I only think of everyone's pain & mine,death & such,
but i guess i better quit & think of better things,
start building on firmer soil
or i'll come crashing down with salt water stings,
dirty,wet,& spoiled.


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okay,i'm going to start building my castle on a better peice of soil,rather than let it sink farther.Wish me good luck =]



 And there she weaves by night and day,
a magic web of colours gay.~Tennyson

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allan
Senior Member
since 2000-04-09
Posts 620
On the road
1 posted 2000-05-19 05:16 PM


I like your style. Excellent images!

Good luck Swåmp¤Faerÿie!!!  

Joel the wolf
Senior Member
since 2000-04-06
Posts 1333
Angels Camp
2 posted 2000-05-20 03:48 AM


I wish you the very best of luck, but I don't think you need it, kid. Luck is in your heart, I can see it.

Joel.< !signature-->

 I howl a mournful song, that echos within my chambered heart, for all to read? nay for all to feel.


[This message has been edited by Joel the wolf (edited 05-20-2000).]

Swåmp¤Faerÿie
Member
since 2000-03-29
Posts 358
Illinois
3 posted 2000-05-22 11:34 PM


Thank you allan and joel =] Wish me godspeed too....lol cause things are going slow...really really slow......thanks anyhow!! =]

creature from the black lagoon


 And there she weaves by night and day,
a magic web of colours gay.~Tennyson

plug452
New Member
since 2000-05-22
Posts 6
natchitoches, louisiana. U.S.A
4 posted 2000-05-23 05:02 AM


I am new at this to, but i think you poem is

awsome. The words are filled with meaning

and the passion eminates from it. Great job.
                        
Plug


 

Swåmp¤Faerÿie
Member
since 2000-03-29
Posts 358
Illinois
5 posted 2000-05-25 11:32 PM


Thank you plug =] i appreciate your words of praise!!   thanks!!

swamp faeryie


 And there she weaves by night and day,
a magic web of colours gay.~Tennyson

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