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Irie
Senior Member
since 1999-12-01
Posts 1493
Washington State

0 posted 2000-05-18 07:44 PM


You tell me that you love me
You say you are devout
But your kind of love
I can really do with out

Your actions don’t show love
Disgust is what I detect
The words that you speak
They show me no respect

When you decide to speak to me
Demeaning words are your choice
Grinding me into the dirt
With that tone in your voice

With you I can do nothing right
Doesn’t matter what it might be
You’re always searching for fault
And little ways to degrade me

Always finding a new approach
To keep me under your thumb
You can’t lose your control
So you treat me like I’m dumb

Now dumb I may have been
For choosing you as my lifes mate
I’ve tried to make things better
But I fear I’m a little too late

I've tried to make you see
Given it everything I've got
Things are too far gone now
More severe than I thought

The things that you say
And the anger that you bare
Treating me like a child
To me it’s really not fair

At first I was hurt
Now I’m just damn mad
Your child I am not
I already have a Dad

One that truly loves me
He’s very gentle and kind
How does one do that?
I’ll bet that blows your mind!

So pardon me "your arrogance"
Your expectations I can not sustain
You’d better make some changes
Before you cause me any more pain

For these walkin’ boots are ready
They’re fittin’ just like a glove
And they’re ready to start a walkin’
Away from your so called love





[This message has been edited by Irie (edited 05-18-2000).]

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Isis
Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296
Sunny Queensland
1 posted 2000-05-18 08:48 PM


You go Irie, put on those boots and get away!!  Strength to you hon  

 I'll tell you this...... No eternal reward will forgive us now for wasting the dawn.....
~Isis~
(Goddess - Sovereign of the Spirit)



starboards
Member
since 1999-10-14
Posts 467
longwood, florida
2 posted 2000-05-18 10:57 PM


I LOVE THIS ONE!! it shows that ur strong even if you think otherwise...i like ur style of writing...keep it up k?

ashley

 "Falling in love is just that - falling.
Sometimes you merely trip and stub your toe.
Sometimes you fall to your hands and knees.
But sometimes you smack your head against the pavement and die."

Sven
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Member Laureate
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937
East Lansing, MI USA
3 posted 2000-05-19 12:12 PM


"These boots are made for walkin'
And that's just what they'll do. . .
One of these days the boots are gonna
Walk all over you. . ."

Excellent Irie!!  You have really done well with this one. . . I can feel the emotions here very well. . .

Very good my friend. . .

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 That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl


Danny Holloway
Member Elite
since 2000-01-15
Posts 2034
Tulsa, OK
4 posted 2000-05-19 12:08 PM


Some really nice writing here!  Hope it's just writing and not your real situation.
~~take care~~
dh

Joel the wolf
Senior Member
since 2000-04-06
Posts 1333
Angels Camp
5 posted 2000-05-20 03:31 AM


What I want to know is Why you havn't started walken???
Great Poem strong!!


Joel

 I howl a mournful song, that echos within my chambered heart, for all to read? nay for all to feel.

Duchess
New Member
since 2000-05-18
Posts 6

6 posted 2000-05-20 12:48 PM


If it is real and not vicarious writing, then I commend you for seeing the truth of "his kind of love".  The poem showed strength and determination.  One phrase comes to mind, "You go, girl!"

duch

Irie
Senior Member
since 1999-12-01
Posts 1493
Washington State
7 posted 2000-05-22 10:53 PM


Isis...Thank you! Giving him one last chance!

Starboards...I try to be strong, but sometimes it breaks me down. But I always manage to get back up on my feet and brush of the dust.

Sven...thank you so much for your always kind words! Glad you liked this one.

Danny...Yes, unfortunately it is real life, but working on it!  

Joel....I haven't started walkin' cuz I'm a fighter. I don't give up so easy. I still love him, just going to take some work. BUT, if things don't change soon, I'm walkin' and he knows it!

Duch....His kind of love is in need of change. I'm trying to show him what love is supposed to be....we'll see.

I know you all might think I'm a glutten for punishment....but like I said. I don't quit until I KNOW there is no chance! Believe me when I say I put him in his place when needed! And if the time comes, I'll walk!
Thank you all for you kind words and comments!

~Sheri


[This message has been edited by Irie (edited 05-22-2000).]

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