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Bronx
Member
since 2000-01-28
Posts 84
Oviedo, Florida, U.S.

0 posted 2000-05-17 08:35 PM


5 Feet Under

My money has deteriorated,
My friends have left me,
My family is gone,
My life as i know it is over,

My life is in the pits,
And i don't know what to do,
People keep telling me to get help,
But They're not willing to give it to me,

I have no more money,
I have no more friends,
I have no more family,
I have no more life,

BUT!

I still have hope,
I AM NOT dead yet,
I only 5 feet under,
I have 1 foot to the bottom,
And 6 to the top,
It seems easier to let it go,
But...I don't want to,
I don't have to,
I have a choice,
I am still alive,
I am still very alive,
And plan to stay that way for a long time!

Because after all...
I'm only 4 feet under!


by
Bronx


 Be careful!
It's a jungle out there!


© Copyright 2000 Bronx - All Rights Reserved
starboards
Member
since 1999-10-14
Posts 467
longwood, florida
1 posted 2000-05-17 11:10 PM


nice ending!! i like this one bronx! im glad that im not the only one that used to think like that....good job once again!

ashley

 "Falling in love is just that - falling.
Sometimes you merely trip and stub your toe.
Sometimes you fall to your hands and knees.
But sometimes you smack your head against the pavement and die."

Isis
Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296
Sunny Queensland
2 posted 2000-05-18 01:02 AM


Was getting worried there, glad to hear you fighting back and not giving up, hope is the talisman my friend.  Great work  

 I'll tell you this...... No eternal reward will forgive us now for wasting the dawn.....
~Isis~
(Goddess - Sovereign of the Spirit)



Joel the wolf
Senior Member
since 2000-04-06
Posts 1333
Angels Camp
3 posted 2000-05-19 02:55 AM


I guess we all seem to have that?? buried feeling.
you have put it well here my friend.
Joel.

 I howl a mournful song, that echos within my chambered heart, for all to read? nay for all to feel.

JOY 14
Senior Member
since 1999-09-22
Posts 1419
Wisconsin USA
4 posted 2000-05-19 02:19 PM


My adivice is to dig yourself out a little at a time.  Good job expressing yourself here.

Joy

Dream_Cloud
Junior Member
since 2000-03-25
Posts 10
Daytona Beach, FL USA
5 posted 2000-05-19 05:46 PM


So you're...climbing out of your grave? (That's from Christine, by the way!)
  Anyway, nice poem..interesting concept...Liked it.

  "You can never make someone love you...all you can do is be someone who can be loved."

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