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Walter Poe
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since 1999-10-13
Posts 787


0 posted 2000-05-02 05:56 AM


The man entered the crowded
No resistance he met
Or Fires set in his hair
The bar was hot and rancid
His breath was at the edge
his neck required the bottle
to heal his heavy head
the golden nectar tamed him
and the fumes made him red
pouring down his neck
to soothe him to his bed
The apples bit his toungue
"Im better now" he said

I am a cider drinker
of this i am not proud
but the alcohol soon
enough drowns out the crowd

  Hello darkness, my old friend,
I've come to talk with you again,
Because a vision softly creeping,
Left its seeds while I was sleeping,
And the vision that was planted in my brain
Still remains
Within the sound of silence.

© Copyright 2000 Paul Weatherstone - All Rights Reserved
Janet Marie
Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554

1 posted 2000-05-02 11:20 AM


The bar was hot and rancid
His breath was at the edge
his neck required the bottle
to heal his heavy head
the golden nectar tamed him
and the fumes made him red
pouring down his neck
to soothe him to his bed
The apples bit his toungue
"Im better now" he said
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many people feel this way...tamed by the nectar.
this was well written... great rhyme flow and imagery of the bar.
Cider? is that the name for beer over there where you are? I love all the different lingos and knicknames that "you guys" use.
much more colorful than ours *smile*
take care, kind poet, jm

Joel the wolf
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since 2000-04-06
Posts 1333
Angels Camp
2 posted 2000-05-02 08:30 PM


Yes I'm familiar with this bar, I sat in one as a kid most every day, as my dad worked his elbow.
Great imagery.
Joel.

 I howl a mournful song, that echos within my chambered heart, for all to read? nay for all to feel.

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