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Dark_kisses_Within
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since 03-21-2000
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Kansas


0 posted 05-01-2000 11:16 AM       View Profile for Dark_kisses_Within   Email Dark_kisses_Within   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit Dark_kisses_Within's Home Page   View IP for Dark_kisses_Within

Damn this wall that surrounds me
That protects me from the pain
I built it many years ago
And now I take the blame
It use to help me wake each day
And see the glory of the light
Now I stand alone in my world
With nothing more in sight
Damn this wall that surrounds me
I want to make it go away
No one wants to climb it
Or fight it each and every day
It keeps me locked in this hole
For no one else to see
The pain and misery I feel
Oh why does it have to be
Damn this wall that surrounds me
I want to feel the love once more
For someone to get close to me
And open up this door
Hand me a hammer, a saw, an axe
I want so badly to break through
Just to feel his arms around me
And to feel the love so true
Damn this wall that surrounds me
I yearn to be set free
Tired of this loneliness
My tear stained face that has come to be
So here I sit and cry
Not knowing where I should be
Tired of this darkness
Damn this wall that surrounds me!!!



 I do not love you for being perfect.....
I love you for being perfect for me!!


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Joel the wolf
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since 04-06-2000
Posts 1341
Angels Camp


1 posted 05-01-2000 02:09 PM       View Profile for Joel the wolf   Email Joel the wolf   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Joel the wolf's Home Page   View IP for Joel the wolf

This poem puts me back 21/2 years ago, I had put myself into the deepest/darkest hole I could find, with unclimbable walls.
I didn't think there was a way out "ever".
So that's when I started to write.
I found out that they can't climb in you must climb out. Use your writings to latter upon, take a step up, soon you will be over the walls.
this is a great poem, and a great way of saying ?? I'm ready.
Love ya kid. haha
Joel.

 I howl a mournful song, that echos within my chambered heart, for all to read? nay for all to feel.
SpitFire
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since 04-19-2000
Posts 2428


2 posted 05-01-2000 10:55 PM       View Profile for SpitFire   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for SpitFire

~I could feel your emotion in this poem...makes it a great post.  Keep letting it out...
Isis
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since 09-06-99
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Sunny Queensland


3 posted 05-02-2000 12:08 AM       View Profile for Isis   Email Isis   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Isis's Home Page   View IP for Isis

Break down the walls hon, just like Joel said, inch by inch, brick by brick, open your world to love again, it's worth the battle scars to find true love!  *hugs* and strength to you my friend  

 A heart and soul are not judged by how much you love, but by how much you are loved by others...
~Isis~
(Goddess - Sovereign of the Spirit)


kynder
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since 04-11-2000
Posts 535
Tallahassee, Florida


4 posted 05-02-2000 03:57 AM       View Profile for kynder   Email kynder   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for kynder

oh yeah the tears flowed on this one.  i wish i could say i can see you behind those walls, but i can't climb over mine either... what to do, what to do....   i guess write on...

thank you.

kynder

  The years teach much which the days never know. Ralph Waldo Emerson
SwŚmp§Faerˇie
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since 03-29-2000
Posts 357
Illinois


5 posted 05-02-2000 03:25 PM       View Profile for SwŚmp§Faerˇie   Email SwŚmp§Faerˇie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for SwŚmp§Faerˇie

been there,done that....and i'm still stuck in my black lagoon...oh well... It's hard to tell if building boundaries around yourself hurts or helps....sometimes they do both,either way it's a pain in the butt. But this is an excellent poem,i really love this forum...it's the best.

swamp


 And there she weaves by night and day,
a magic web of colours gay.~Tennyson
Honeybee
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since 12-26-1999
Posts 5512
Ontario, CANADA


6 posted 05-02-2000 04:10 PM       View Profile for Honeybee   Email Honeybee   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Honeybee

You have described my situation perfectly in this poem, I know all too well the pain that you are expressing.  Well written and a bittersweet read for me.  Unfortunately, I have no advice to give to you upon tearing the walls down because I have yet to do so too.  I do hope that you take Joel's advice however.  I wish you the best!

Take care,
Melissa Honeybee  
jwesley
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since 04-30-2000
Posts 6413
Texas . . .


7 posted 05-02-2000 07:09 PM       View Profile for jwesley   Email jwesley   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for jwesley

Wow.  Say's it all, doesn't it. Good, passionate howl.  I really like the line

"Damn this wall that surrounds me!"

I think that could qualify by itself as one of the best and shortest poems ever.

Stay with it....

j.
Scarlet Lady
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since 02-11-2000
Posts 247
Midwest


8 posted 05-03-2000 10:11 AM       View Profile for Scarlet Lady   Email Scarlet Lady   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Scarlet Lady

Isn't part of the wall coming down that we must first realize it is there??  I think you see these walls now so plainly, feel it's weight, and feel the helplessness to tear it down yourself?  I can relate with you.....I believe these walls fall when we get beyond "our" ability to keep them standing any longer.  Great poem you've shared with us, with lot's of hard hitting truth!  
JamesMichael
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since 11-16-1999
Posts 31622
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA


9 posted 05-04-2000 06:47 AM       View Profile for JamesMichael   Email JamesMichael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for JamesMichael

Enjoyed reading this...you built the wall and you are the one that gets to tear it down...you need now only choose the method..as you say hammer, saw, and ax.  If you're in a hurry try some dynamite.  Reminded me of the day when they started tearing down the Berlin wall.   James
Jesse Jaymz
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since 01-24-2000
Posts 757
Youngstown, ohio


10 posted 07-10-2000 03:49 PM       View Profile for Jesse Jaymz   Email Jesse Jaymz   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Jesse Jaymz's Home Page   View IP for Jesse Jaymz

it took me awhile to find this poem but i am glad i did.  this is so true.  i built such a wall that i couldnt see who really cared about me.  and now it is to late to go back.  i hope one day i can tear it all down.  or have someone help me.  great work my friend.  i wish i could tear down that wall for you.

Do you bury me when Iím gone? Do you teach me while Iím here? Just as soon as I belong, Then itís time I disappear...
MetallicA "I disappear"

 
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