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SpitFire
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since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396


0 posted 2000-04-26 09:27 PM


Someone I thought wanted to know me died today.
An attempt too late
a life grown old
alone
never knowing me
never trying hard enough
not in my life
never knew what I liked
how my voice sounds
now that I am older
how my smile looks when I feel good
hadn't seen a tear of mine
most of which he created
in a far away place
he knows it's too late
to begin again
something that should of happened
when he said it would
years ago
I waited,...eager to learn
eager to live
to try it
an ending so bitter, so cold
empty and stale
I've thought a lot about this happening
I knew it would
knew you'd gone too far
I gave you a chance to redeem
yourself and all the pain you caused
watch me from where you are now
see what I'm like
see what I've become
on my own
in this world
in a harsh place to grow
I've survived you
I've survived my own darkness
look at me from where you are
smile for me because....
I made it...
I'm making it everyday.


I wrote this a while ago...it didn't actually take place today.



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Isis
Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296
Sunny Queensland
1 posted 2000-04-26 09:50 PM




See?  I'm smiling anyways for you, for making it this far!  Whether it was a while ago, or yesterday you deserve the triumphant smile, to overcome such sadness and pain is indeed an achievement hon, I know...
Great work  

 A heart and soul are not judged by how much you love, but by how much you are loved by others...
~Isis~
(Goddess - Sovereign of the Spirit)



Joel the wolf
Senior Member
since 2000-04-06
Posts 1333
Angels Camp
2 posted 2000-04-27 01:12 AM


Sometimes we forsee our own futures, I may write something down now then post it much later when I think it's right.
Well this is right for you know kid.
You are doing OK.
and your expressing your self well.
Thanks for a small window into your world.

Joel.

 I howl a mornful song, that echos within my chambered heart, for all to read? nay for all to feel.

SpitFire
Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396

3 posted 2000-04-27 09:27 AM


~Thanks for peeking
and thanks for your smile Isis...I felt it!!!

Kurly
Junior Member
since 2000-04-21
Posts 48

4 posted 2000-04-27 12:10 PM


Great Poem!! I'm glad you made it, keep on writing I enjoy your works.
amazon_lover
Member
since 2000-04-09
Posts 491
Dublin,Ireland
5 posted 2000-04-27 01:41 PM


Hi
You're not what you've become,what you're going to be,what you were. You're what you feel,think,dream,desire etc.
A man/woman has lost essence of good aspects when darkness surrounds or you're loomed by some ghosts which taunted you.
You should be happy now because that ghost is no more near you. Just don't give a damn to him or his thoughts.
Stay positive and I'm sure you have a bright life ahead of you. Don't care about this moron. Stay open and you'll find your love someday. Have a very very good day and life.
Sincerely
A_L

SpitFire
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since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396

6 posted 2000-04-27 01:49 PM


~Thank you, thank you for your kind words of encouragement.  Your reply has already made me feel strength...you speak with such a sense of  belief in what you say.  I'll take it,  think of it often, and use it...try to live it.  Thanks
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